HEY there!

tell me everything!

 

HEY there

I keep knocking on my head

Wondering where I have gone

INSANE

 

HEY there

SIRI!!!!!

Wake up boy

Please stop pretending

To be

INSANE

 

PLEASE STOP TALKING

 

I’ve lost leverage

My mind reaches hights

Of new pressure

MalFUnCtioning

Twitches of PURE pleasure

 

Guess what

 

I decided

to get lost in my mind…tonight?

for the last time…HA HA yeah right

stop paying attention

to the senses  

that keep me stuck in reality

 

I break down

Tears melt personality

Pain reminds me of fear

I guess I cant express

My immortality

 

I use pillows

To drown out 

Screams

And what not

Tell myself

The drugs

DO NOT

Inject poison

 

Living proof

I got FUCKED

Mind raped

And lost alone

 

The only thing

That keeps me sane

Is pain

Pain reminds me of fear

OUCH

Reminds me im living

In an endless dream

 

Where screams come out with out giving

And death is only the beginning

 

Reviews

[Laura Nikkinen]

I'm smiling. For some weird reason it's not the most appropriate thing do be doing after reading this poem (song?) of yours. I can see the spiritual side to this (in fact, this is probably one of the most spiritual poems I've read on here, if that's how I wanna read it... filter your words), and I can see the substances ( reality,whatever that is.. different for everyone, reason... the worst drugs people are addicted to in this world, the scariest ones to be tripping on too) speaking as well, or a very restless mind.

I like how chirpy you made it in a way (the tempo, rhythm... chirpy or aggressive, don't really know, I'm so indecisive), and how "dark" (fyi.. .hate the word dark, how about just humane) it is at the same time... humanely raw, and how out of place that emotion is after reading into the actual words, the whole work is like a happy tear, if that makes any sense.. or an unhappy smile. How about that.

I'll stop taking your time now.

[Alyssa!!!]

dude that rocked!!!! remeber tha sane 1s are tha crazy 1s not us!!!

[Chloe Madison Taylor.]

it got better towards the end.

i think you may be just as crazy as i am.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

See you haven't lost your touch, your creative flare rings out in your short story and peoms as weel good write.

[Heidi Hallucination]

i love it Siri it has alot a creativity to it.

p.s. i dont think ur insane

[SM Davis]

I've lost leverage
My mind reaches hights
Of new pressure
MalFUnCtioning
Twitches of PURE pleasure

I really loved this!!! (I think you mean heights). I can relate to this character. I seem to have been there. This is a really great imagery poem. You give light to the character without streamlining his integrity. If this is a personal write and not a character write, hold on...hold tight to what you know. YOU are YOU and who you are is a human being with wants, needs, desires, and dreams. Death truly is only the beginning, but death is a timely guest. He comes in his own time.

[Amanda]

what expression...this rant shows what it is like to be confused and in pain, but escape into the drugs or anything else doesn't make reality go away....when you come out of it, it is still there screaming to be let in again, I know. listen to the voice of experience...my escape was alcohol and it didn't work for me.

Though reality is a real b***h sometimes, it is better than the downward spiral...believe me, i have been there. come talk to me sometime, sweetie, ok?

Amanda

[Kiri J]

siri... this is screaming of confusion and pain. as a poem it's fantastic - intriguing, emotive...

but as a reflection of your mindset it scares me. i'm not worried about you, but i don't want you to want to escape yourself. i love that self... and not just because you're nice i f*****g dig you coz you deserve it.

and you're so f*****g talented.
i love it.x