Decay of the cafe

Just when you think

you are having a good day.

you decide you visit the cafe.

to your dismay,

people have been having a field day.

there will be hell to pay,

like a gamma ray,

someone lost a fiance,

you just want to plug away.

writing all day,

maybe hit a triple play.

but others want to yack away.

while you scream at your computer display.

while others use language,

that should be in an ashtray.

others write about fading away.

other's about being swept away,

by their new love of the day.

sweet enough,

to give you tooth decay.

what is the rate of pay?

for going M.I.A?

judgement day,

not in a good way.

Author's Note

I literally used every word i knew rhyming with cafe. this is what i got. its shitty i know but here ya go.... I cant stop rhyming!

Reviews

[Emberlorna]

I think it's different in a good way & I like the rhyming as well. I can relate a lot to this piece. Well done :}

[Marie]

I don't know why gombetter wants you to get rid of your punctuation. It's really a matter of preference. Your punctuation is part of what you're saying.

[gombeggar]

the rhyming was fun and fine...it's quite a nice happy poem...but disregard all the commas and periods...u don't need 'em :)

[Baby Ricochet]

It works. Good job

[Tabitha t]

thanks! its nice to get reiviews from someone of your calibur!

[Craig2591]

No, it's not s****y. I think it's cute that you rhymed (almost) every line with 'ay'. Another good rant.

[Tabitha t]

thank you very much!

[Silhouette]

It's not s****y, it's cool. I like that you rhyme every word and the flow is excellent. Lots of emotion in here, too. I like it a lot :)

[Tabitha t]

thanks!

[Silhouette]

No prob! :)

[KAOlmsted]

We're all going to hell in a hand basket ;-) I love vents about this place. You should read mine some day...it's called the March.

Shameless self-promotion ;-)

[Tabitha t]

lmao ill look it up now. I think i am getting a hang of this. lmao

[KAOlmsted]

:-D