Betrayed

Betrayed

A Poem by Da Leigh
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I wrote this poem a few years ago and just found it while digging through some old papers. I decided to revise it a bit and post.

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There's something wrong inside my mind.
The hope once held, now left behind.
The love we shared between us two, 
now I can't bear to think of you.

Your words flowed clear through the connection,
until she infected the interception.

The trust freely given has withered and died,
now all that I have left inside
is regret and sorrow for the time I wasted 
and multiple spoonfuls of lies I tasted.

These twisted thoughts play in my brain.
You're doing just fine and I've gone insane.

I tilt my head up to the empty sky and pray for an ounce of care,
but as it turns out I am all alone,
No one is listening,
No one is there. 




© 2014 Da Leigh



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"The trust freely given has withered and died,
now all that I have left inside
is regret and sorrow for the time I wasted
and multiple spoonfuls of lies I tasted."

I really enjoyed this part, and the whole poem. Very neat mental imagery.

Keep it up!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Da Leigh

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words. You are an amazing writer so it means a lot to have such posi.. read more



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A splendid read and write. Thank you for penning...:)........................

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this. Especially the end:

"I tilt my head up to the empty sky and pray for an ounce of care,
but as it turns out I am all alone,
No one is listening,
No one is there. "
This feeling's so close to me sometimes.


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really powerful piece. I love the wording and metaphors, and how you wrote with so much emotion; each stanza clearly conveys your feelings of loss and betrayal. Excellent work! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Da Leigh

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Gabriela! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Glad you liked it.. read more
I love when I can inhale emotions from the pores of another and feel her words beyond her words...this is truly a beautiful write, one I can deeply relate to. Truly wonderful...

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Da Leigh

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment, Teeya. It means a lot. I'm glad you could.. read more
"The trust freely given has withered and died,
now all that I have left inside
is regret and sorrow for the time I wasted
and multiple spoonfuls of lies I tasted."

I really enjoyed this part, and the whole poem. Very neat mental imagery.

Keep it up!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Da Leigh

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words. You are an amazing writer so it means a lot to have such posi.. read more

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I am, by no means, a novelist. I enjoy writing for the release and the enjoyment others get out of reading it. I tend to write from the heart, though I am a firm believer in Science and truth, but as .. more..