My Heartburn

"True love is friendship set on fire" I don't know who said that.

 

Brutally honest... Usually I am

The first to speak.  The last to care.

For the first time the words are stuck

And I feel them choking me

Making my heart skip beats.

 

I could tell you your hair looks dumb

(Although I like it now)

Or your hockey team sucks.

I've told you the dinner you cooked

Was just fine...

...But I could have done better.

Told you not to bother arguing,

Since I am always right,

And you called me a dork!

I've said some stupid things

And didn't care when you laughed...

Just happy because you laughed

And called me a dork...

Again....

 

 

But these words are stuck

...Giving me heartburn...

And I am scared to death

The moment might pass

I might never hear them

Make it past my lips

 

Heard once that true love

Is friendship set on fire.

Now, after all this time

I am scorching hot.

But scared you’re not.

 

A friendship is not worth losing

To the illusion of love.

For every passionate thought

One follows that makes me question...

...Am I good enough?

And that's why...

     ...This "I love you" is stuck!

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

I love you is so hard to say some times especial when you truly mean it from the bottom of your heart. People to often throw the phrase around not thinking to depth in which it means. I tell people all the time that I love them but I do mean it. Because I do love people and I believe that people should know they are loved. It may be a hard thing for you to say because so many other things get in the way. You thoughts become over crowd with doubt or questioning yourself and your feelings. It is true that if you don't express them they could lay heavy in your chest and cause pain until you release them to be heard. This reminds me of an old saying " Love was not put in your heart to stay, Love isn't love until it's given away"

[Brianna Brie]

We take the chance of rejection when we say "I love you" for the first time. The last verse sums that up. Enjoyable read!

[Emily B]

oh, I hope you let it out. . . I hope it found its way into the light of day. Wonderful words.

[-Adam-]

Thats a hard feeeling to swallow. The thought of someone you love not loving back. Anyways thank you for enteing my contest. Great poem!

[Jet Lag]

you made me smile on a very not-so-great morning. i can count on you for uplifting my mood.
what a wonderful poem and even more wonderful feelings! i am happy for you. it is so rare to connect once we get past 16, si? at 16 our connectors will practically attach to anything it seems, and as we age, we are wary and selective. thanks for the poem and best of luck!

[Nana Carmine]

I love it. And there is nothing wrong with feeling 16 again. Though at times it can be troublesome.
Great work, I always seem to love your writing

~Nana Carmine

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

this poem is very wonderful. i really like it. you have a great passion for the one you write about. i use to feel the same way towards my true love and now i'm with the one i love. sometimes it works for friends to fall in love, but sometimes it doesnt. it just means you have to look for the right signs and the right time to ask out. my relationship is working out wonderfully and im even looking forward to asking "THE" question that should be asked only once. again, i love this poem. you wrote it wonderfully. thank you

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Awww, this is such a treasure - what a lucky person who may finally hear these words if you can manage to exclaim them. Wonderful write. Compelling and honest.
Light,
Siddartha

[Twisted Words (Tom)]

I love looking inside you, .... ummm that doesn't sound right. Your mind... your heart. True feelings expressed well is always a winning write to me. And I have had some words stuck in myself lately too, so it feel good to identify with this.

[shadadakiya]

woo thats was just awesome i love it!!! you did a great job (: there is nothing wrong with feeling sixteen that's for sure .