Broken thread

Broken thread

A Poem by tanmay7551
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At times relationships are patched again after some disputes but they do leave some marks and they are not the same anymore.

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They breathe together, they eat together,

They laugh together, they smile together.

This world looked like a memento of their Friendship.

Full of life and energized souls,

Afraid of none and their adventures were a tale.

Each worked on their own to support for a cause,

Sharing their ideas and harmony followed.

Once upon a time dark clouds arrived,

One bullied and other tolerated in vain.

Days that passed act was repeated in fury,

Receiving on other end he at last could not bury.

He rose on the day of revolution that erupted,

Vacated the room and work was stalled.

While one wanted to tie the knots,

Other had no plans to heal wounds or bloats.

Stuck in time all people were around,

There was silence everywhere and air without sound.

There came an Angel on a windy night.

He patched them both for good he thought.

But broken threads always have knots,

Love when pass like a current through threads

It then blocks on the way and they are not so close.

© 2016 tanmay7551


Author's Note

tanmay7551
An incident that happened recently with two of my friends. They were very good friends but had some disputes and now while they are together their relationship is not the same as before. Thought of writing something for the Friends who have knots on their threads!

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I'm sorry to hear your friends had a dispute that put a crimp in the relationship. Unfortunately, this happens all too often. It is easy to say, "I forgive you." It is much harder to actually live that, without heaping guilt and holding onto grudges. I love how you put this idea into words with these lines:
But broken threads always have knots, Love when pass like a current through threads. It then blocks on the way and they are not so close.

Nicely done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words.



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I am sure many could relate to this. relationships and disputes teach us and make us what we are for better or worse. Its a beautiful writing. I visited this earlier but could not leave a review. Thank you for sharing it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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tanmay7551

7 Years Ago

Thanks and I am glad that you liked it!
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Sometimes sorry is not enough, I'm sorry your friends are going through their own trial. The emotion in your piece is very honest and raw. Lovely expression.Starz

Posted 7 Years Ago


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tanmay7551

7 Years Ago

Thanks Starzy, I am glad that you liked it! Again, you are right - Sorry is not enough every time...
I can relate to this so much Tanmay. It's funny how when we have a relationship with someone, we kind of expect it to just be perfect, and when it isn't, we get bad feelings because the "dream" is gone. I call it a dream because perfection is just a story we tell ourselves. It isn't real. Those bad feelings will stay with us until we recognize the obsession of the "dream" and let it go, then accept the reality of our lives without attaching "stories" or "should be's" to it. I hope your friends find some acceptance :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


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tanmay7551

7 Years Ago

Oh yes for sur they should find acceptance someday. However, the impact was such that all good buddi.. read more
I'm sorry to hear your friends had a dispute that put a crimp in the relationship. Unfortunately, this happens all too often. It is easy to say, "I forgive you." It is much harder to actually live that, without heaping guilt and holding onto grudges. I love how you put this idea into words with these lines:
But broken threads always have knots, Love when pass like a current through threads. It then blocks on the way and they are not so close.

Nicely done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words.
The raw emotion of this poem reaches out and touches you, it's words tragic but nicely put. I really like the metaphor of a thread having knots in it, I've never heard it put that way before! Depending on what happened, friendships/relationships can be restored or left irreparable. Many can relate to this, myself included. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

7 Years Ago

Thanks Jack. I am glad that you liked it and shared your precious thoughts!
Some times just saying you are sorry is not enough. Trust has to be regained for a friendship to flourish. Valentine

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

7 Years Ago

Thanks for your insight Valentine.
Lovely poem! You made me feel all of it like it's really happening as I am reading it...Amazing poetry. You write really good. The flow of the write was superb..like there's no place where you see an unneccessary word or sentence and everything rhymes perfectly--Well done

And also I must say: You have worked well on improving--or should I say removing--the grammatical errors!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

7 Years Ago

Thanks Devanshi for your inspiring words. If at all it is happening then it is because of people lik.. read more
Devanshi

7 Years Ago

You're always welcome!!
So relatable to me... I could feel the emotions within...
I recently had a fight with my friend but fortunately, we used the fight to make our relation more stronger. Yet, sometimes, it goes the other way round with people... and it's really painful...
i pray everything goes well with all the friends in this world....
nice work done : )
Anindita

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

7 Years Ago

Thanks Anindita for your heartfelt review. Cheers for all friends of the world. I am glad that you l.. read more
Anindita Janhabee

7 Years Ago

My pleasure reading...

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