The Righteous sin

The Righteous sin

A Poem by tanmay7551
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The grief of a person who lost his friend (Army Martyr) and has been orphaned.

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Our pranks together shot to fame,

Synchronized minds, no blame-game.

Spontaneous plans, schemes of laughter

Against all odds, you were always a true fighter.

Boat of our friendship participated in several expeditions

We sailed with courage handling all frictions.

Difference between day and night diminished,

I wish the journey would have never finished.

Godspeed my friend, captain you were.

Crew like me safeguarded without fare.

Breezing through journey of life and fenced,

Your righteous sin, we were ship-wrecked.

Leaving me behind in the storm so high

You abandoned our boat, I can only sigh.

Done with a cause, I never refused

Self-existence is a formality, so confused!

My cursing has no time and place,

Martyrs always have a divine face.

Banished to hell without kith and kin,

Righteous sin, Your righteous sin!


© 2016 tanmay7551



Author's Note

tanmay7551
Dedicated to an old friend who is no more and died young for the country!

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Many kinds of life to be lived.
"My cursing has no time and place,
Martyrs always have a divine face.
Banished to hell without kith and kin,
Righteous sin, Your righteous sin!"
The above lines hard and true. A Martyrs shall die. We pray for a worthwhile cause. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

10 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind words!
Coyote Poetry

10 Months Ago

You are welcome.



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Good one, Tm. Sorry for your loss. Friends may not always become 'old' friends, but they will always be friends kept alive in our hearts and minds.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Great work. I was intrigued from the start. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 9 Months Ago


good dedication...rest in real peace those friends....


Posted 10 Months Ago


Losing someone close to you is hard, Family and friends loss really can tear one up. Valentine

Posted 10 Months Ago


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Deeply rooted in emotion, a stunning write, of life long friendship. Starz x

Posted 10 Months Ago


A very powerful poem indeed. Such elegance and strong emotions embedded in those words. It is a really touching poem and beautifully written.


Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

10 Months Ago

Thanks you Atiba for your review!
Many kinds of life to be lived.
"My cursing has no time and place,
Martyrs always have a divine face.
Banished to hell without kith and kin,
Righteous sin, Your righteous sin!"
The above lines hard and true. A Martyrs shall die. We pray for a worthwhile cause. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

10 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind words!
Coyote Poetry

10 Months Ago

You are welcome.
A powerful and well written poem. I enjoyed the read! ~Sharon (P.S. In line 8 I might change the word should to would.) I wish the journey would have never finished.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

10 Months Ago

Thanks Sharon for the contructive review, will try your suggestion too.
Miss Sharon

9 Months Ago

You were kind to accept my suggestion! Thank you.
This is a great write and heart wrenching. The oxymoronic title gets a great meaning with the poem. The emotion involved in friendship as well as for a person who martyred for the country are both strong and well presented. Good job.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

tanmay7551

10 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words.
very beautifully written. i loved all of the symbolism and sentiment. very good. i read it the first time and liked it and then i saw your dedication and went back to read it again... it gave me chills!! very good.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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tanmay7551

bangalore, KR, India



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