From Hell

Lyrical about a sad man who sinned his whole life and has reviewed his mistakes.

Feeling the pain drain from my blood stained chains,

Reaping the pasts creeping to my minds inner shames,

Omitting through my brain the distruction of my reins,

Mouthing out the words infecting any tamed,

 

Housing all thoughts of curupted pandora box,

Even to this day holding any seen as lost,

Living without cost the life i wished i crossed,

Learning evermore the damnation i exaust,

 

I can't take the pressure of the path seen as simple,

 

Amazed at the sight of my futuristic limbo,

Dazed to the thought of the goated symbol,

Miserably i wait to the fight towards this figure,

I know not of an escape instead i pursue my inner,

To find the final days pleasant, from the eyes of this sinner...

Author's Note

look down the side

Reviews

[kurrupted]

intense, deep, lyrical...something naz the rapper could use, or better yet deathrow records. excellent piece.

[Michael of Gilead]

I don't get it....why would your pain drain in line one?
in-between doesn't make much sense
and ending with finding your final days pleasant?
when your comment is sinned his whole life and has reviewed his mistakes?

[Awdures]

Love the double meaning here hun, reads like a lyrical rap, rhythmic and tight writing.

[Richard Williams]

Intense write with gripping imagery.

[Ruth]

The inner self is the only remedy, it seems....when all is suffocated and wings folded....we have no other choice but to look inside, hey....we may even find what we like lol Poignant poem love xx

[Haifa]

for me, your poem shows things like you are about to "give up" and also "broken" but at all its very good poem. Keep on!

[al25]

Like the imagery you used and the rhyme worked well. Great write.

[Roxi L]

From Hell I Admit...nice.
This is really powerful I really like this...keep it up!!!!

Writing keeps the dream alive
~Roxi~

[?]

From Hell I Admit, hmmmmmmmm
Mercy and Grace are abudant all we have to do is accept them. Freely given.

Very intense, thought provoking, full of emotions.
Very good write

[Kes]

From Hell I Admit. Nice.
I can't even do that. I just get distracted by the poem's theme and mess it up.
I like it. I'm into the darker stuff.
Great work.