Everyone struggles sometimes

We 
held 
each 
other 
like 
suicide 
notes 
till 
the 
feeling 
passed 
intertwined 
sarcophagus 
of 
broken 
bones 
subtle 
smiles 
in 
shadow 
light 
we drift 
into 
each other 
into 
the 
night 
......and breath 

Reviews

[alanwgraham]

This relationship is not entirely positive from your words. Where has it come from, where is it going? These matters are left to our imagination. It's an interesting question as to how your presentation affects our reception of your poem. I guess its a personal matter but i think it works here and perhaps acts as a lens to focus us on the meaning.
I like it Terry - i think less is more here.
Cheers,
Alan

[andrew mitchell]

Nice work Terry.".......polished write indeed.

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Everyone has a relationship 'crisis' moment; the moment we stop to take a breath from tribulation, is the moment we address our issues. Well, this is my interpretation of your spiralling down write - very thought-provoking and poignant - :-)