Laurel Leaves

Strength in survival.

A young and slender maple tree

sprouts from the leafy ground;

a larger tree that lost its grip

now bends the maple down.

No longer does it face the sun

nor eye the night with pride;

it arches back into the earth

and stretches out its side.

The little tree was in the way

when time allowed the fall;

the top is pinned by larger wood,

no longer straight and tall.

The tree, however, summons life:

what's down is dry and dead;

a little tree beset with strife

lives on and bows its head.

Reviews

[Pumpkinspice]

Beautifully rhymed and the imagery is fantastic. Thank you for your submission. I'll add a rating after judging. Good luck in my contest:) Pumpkin:D

[Desert Dreamer]

And those bends in the wood turn into beautiful shapes as the young tree grows...beautiful language...the pains of life are what make us interesting and unique.

[Poet's World]

A very good poem about the big maple tree... Good luck in the contest...

[Awdures]

Wonderful work. There are some beautifully crafted lines in this poem, and of course some wonderfully colourful metaphors for life and new beginnings.

Impressive work. You did very well to keep the structure and the flow of rhyme here.

[Rose]

I love nature especially tree's. I use to spend hours and hours trying to draw trees. I would struggle a lot when I got to the branches and one mistake would make me feel so upset that I would have to start again. The first stanza was eye-catching it had words that stood out and the flow was beautiful making me lost for words. The flow is being carried throughout the poem making the reader feel amazed by the words you have chosen they work so well. I feel like I am outside standing in front of a tree described in the poem. The poem really does take me away.

[FeliciaS (Poetic Prince..]

I love this

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Awww! This is simply lovely. The rhyme, the meter, and the content are superb. This is going into my favorites, and I doubt that I have a handful.

100 Roses for you!

[FlawedByDesign]

This is a great story about living/growing up in someone's shadow. I have a younger brother and it makes me think how his life has been, growing up next to me, being the 2nd to experience life.

The rhyme and meter lends themselves in creating a easy going flow.

Nicely done.

[Abdul Aziz]

Great write. Witty and clever. The perfect meter lends a great flow, as well. I really enjoyed reading this write.
Great job.