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A Poem by ((Teenage_Poet_Loser))
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A poem by me =D

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In the middle of a grass field
he lies, abondoned
Flies fly past
people walke by
nothing notices
The sound of the typewriter
clicking away
Writing the next piece
of the story
This part ends
The book closes
His body lies still in the tall grass

© 2011 ((Teenage_Poet_Loser))


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I really like the imagery in this, the way of a writer in this.
I really like this part:
"The sound of the typewriter
clicking away
Writing the next piece
of the story
This part ends
The book closes"

Correction:
walk
"people walke by"

Posted 12 Years Ago


Ahhh bliss! Nothing like being outdoors and writing your heart out :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


are my stories that kao =/

Posted 12 Years Ago


very good, im not sure if you meant to but a e at the end of walk, but good.

Posted 12 Years Ago


stick to poetry

Posted 12 Years Ago


I wish I were lying in that grass :) Anyway I really liked it, it was so simple but I could still visualize it. Oh and I am just now reading all my read reviews so your gonna have alot of reviews from me.reading all my read reviews so your gonna have alot of reviews from me.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Huh, pretty awesome write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is fun. To lie and write outside is about perfect.

Posted 12 Years Ago



"nothing notices"
I like this line because its NOTHING not NO ONE, :)


Posted 12 Years Ago


Really lovely writing! I like whole wording.
Keep it up!
Do you read mine too "Anguish and She"
God bless you!
Lucky!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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