Broken Heart

I once was inlove...

the first time
I looked in your eyes,
I knew
knew from the start this would happen.
you take what you want
you brake the things
that I live for
to pleasure your
sick
sadistic
little game
of a broken love
a broken heart...

Reviews

[Russe Salome]

Short poems are good to read. I think that there's a lot to be said about poets who can condense their feelings into just a few lines. And the anguish here is tangible. Just as a notes, there are a few incongruities with your punctuation and capitalization, so just look out for that I suppose. Just make sentences into verse.
Your tone is the thing I love most here, the cutting rage of it all, and I can really relate to that sharp stab of betrayal that's coming through here. Good job, I'm eager to see what comes next.

[Dominique]

I like this it is truly neat peice of writing.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Cookie please haha, though seriously for this write it is something different then your genre. Though it is nice. The feeling is nice in this.

[alegria]

short and nice write..very true..

[Cody Michael]

I like how simple and true this is...very nicely written

[Commit it then to the f..]

It's simple and short, but beautiful :)
I LOVE YOUR WRITING STYLE!

[Aly Jones]

Ooh! I want a cookie!

Sorry, I haven't taken my ADD pills.

[R. Relative]

Inevitably we learn from the brake.. but thats the free spirit of risk something will break..or maybe not break.. ahhh the cost is too much. nice work. Definitely feels like every word is pointedly. making. it. across..

[angel_blues]

wonderful write! the story of your short poem sounds familiar...
anyway, i love it!

[~Lizzy♬]

great write!!!

~Lizzy~

[Sarah Jane]

I really love the last two lines of it. It reminds me of a few people I know. Good write :)