Smile To God With A Nail In Hand

Smile is a call to help...

She said it was her very first smile,

an action of proverbial disorder -

did she know the life after death?

The questions float on top of a bunch

of dead roses, left to die by life.

Such a small thing, life a mere

gesture to smile, to walk, to talk,

and to kill. And so many dead.

There is a fascination with killing

roses in the public, the more you

look the easier it gets, don't.

Words are mere words with lines

at the end of each.

God, God, God! Are you there?

The smile of a girl, the smile.

Pure in action, death in mind, this

is a call to help, but a tale of

mischief, a game played by children.

God, are you there? This is a shout

to call for help, a dead rose in hand,

a smile on her face and a broken nail,

God...

Reviews

[alegria]

i loved the write...amazing...keep writing:))

[Bluefire]

What do I think? Amazing :)

[Orlando Furioso]

This evoked memories of how the UK was when Princess Diana died in the Paris subway. Roses, everywhere roses, flowers of all kinds, millions of them. And lines, messages, all kinds of love, sentiment, feelings. It was astonishing. Your poem reminded me of all that really strongly.

[Aarontastic]

I love it but tbh I can't figure out exactl what it means :s This is one of those mysterious poems that I think a lot of people will make their own interpretations of; the significance/meaning of the roses in particular seems important...ah well. In any case, I thought it was a really good poem because it was intense and somewhat dark and totally cryptic, which Is just what I like. The focus on god in the poem give it a holy/unholy feel and the title is just absolutely awesome. Good job I will be trying to figure this one out lol.

[Morrigan Nicole]

Took me a while, I had to read it a few times to understand it,then once more after that because I liked it just that much

[Kayla :)]

I really liked this. It is a really great poem, i honestly don't know what else to say about it, completely speachless. But it was really good :)

[Monica]

This is an interesting write, thought provoking...

"Such a small thing, life a mere
gesture to smile, to walk, to talk,"

...these lines make you think about life and what we do while we are here...we know there has to be more than such simplicity..."God, God, God! Are you there?"

Well done, this is a great write!

[Coyote Poetry]

"The smile of a girl, the smile.
Pure in action, death in mind, this
is a call to help, but a tale of
mischief, a game played by children."
The poem is amazing. Many questions and thoughts create by the powerful description. Some questions won't be answer til the end. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Brandon W.]

Can't be heard when you shout, easier to hear in a whisper. If God were to yell for us, we'd explode. Insightful and a good read. Brilliant!

[~ninja--I am ~]

dis is amazing