A GRATEFUL HEART

Thankful for being loved by the one you love most

The first time I saw you I knew my life would change for the better and forever. In the company of your love my wandering soul found comfort in your accepting heart.Every day are special days with you in my life. I never take for granted every precious minute we have together even when we have to be apart. Never doubt my love for you. It will not last this lifetime but also until eternity comes to an end. We are not a perfect union but we are perfect for each other and all other matters outside of us are not as important as keeping our bond together. Let it be said our love conquers time and space and all things in between. All of this I express to you now cannot compare to the look on your face as you read these words I love you always...always.

Author's Note

I thought maybe this could be used for a happy anniversary or just a I love you greeting card

Reviews

[Tabby Mac]

I like this piece. I think if you separated it a bit it would read better. After each sentence or line that you have rhyme space out...of that makes sense. Together in a paragraph it is hard to read the flownyou have intended. Every line doesn't need to ryhme but if you space it out right the reader wil and can see what you intended to rhyme.
I hear some rhymes in this piece but it's clump takes its power away. Read one of my poems for an example. I separate my lines to exaggerate the rhyme for the reader. I think you have potential if you just edit a little with form.
Tabby

[Poetic License]

Spot on for Hallmark!!! That was exactly what I thought as I read it. Beautiful sentiments. I loved reading it.

"It will not last this lifetime but also until eternity comes to an end." - Thinking there may be a word missing??? It will not (only) last this lifetime but also until eternity comes to an end.

My absolute favorite line you offer is this:
"Let it be said our love conquers time and space and all things in between. " It gave me butterflies.

As to form, I think this might have been more effective if you went ahead and set it up as it would read for a greeting card. I think it would add punch. You might find that you tighten up syntax that way as well without losing any of the emotional punch. I love words, myself, however, I would imagine typesetters might want it tightened up a bit.

I really enjoyed it. It is a beautiful sentiment and beautifully styled.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha, there is a lovely sentiment in this piece. The thoughts you have penned are relatable and warm. I think perhaps this may benefit from a change in form. To a more traditional verse type format with spacing and line breaks, I think it might read with an easier flow. If not I respect what you've created here. Well done. Izzy

[Kathy Van Kurin]

" A Grateful Heart"
This writing is lovely and I hope you keep enjoying your craft.
Here are a few little changes in your love poem to someone you love; "is special with you" and "the precious minutes," and "It will last"
This poem's Sweet words touched my heart as I know your loved one will feel as well.
Blessings, Kathy

[CSealand]

It will not last this lifetime but also until eternity comes to an end.

It will not only last? As well as an only in next sentence?

All of this I express... Rephrase?

But good in all

[Kittenincake]

Very sweet, I would elaborate more and dive deeper into the "why" behind some of the phrases. Great intentions and potential, I would just be more specific as to why they are perfect for each other or why there is love for this person.

[Bacchus]

I feel like your writings are ideas that could be short stories or a series of poems.