A WALK ON THE BEACH

A short,short story

HE. "I dare not look at you. After all these years together my eyes will tell you everything. You know me better than I know myself... My knees are killing me... What to say ?What do I do? I wish you would say something. Just start talking about anything... I'm not happy anymore. I just want to shout it out so loud the whole world could hear it. Let me walk you to the water. Keep thinking what to say. I'm just not happy with us anymore. I mean,with you. I've met someone else.Someone different. I want a new life but... SHE. " Oh God. My knees.My back. I'm so out of shape walking like this. Oh well we need our little moments together. Especially now. I wish you would try to relax and let me look at you. Maybe now is not a good time to tell you but everything is going to change soon. Not much time babe.Getting weaker everyday. I'm glad you're taking me to the water but you are so distracted. I need your attention... Just breathe. Say what you need to say and don't stop until you explain everything.So thankful. I am so thankful for you... TOGETHER. "I don't know what I would do without you."

Author's Note

Very experimental.Just wanted to try something different.Maybe it will work maybe it won't.But at least I got it out of me

Reviews

[Corset]

wonderful, and yet so sad , I hope they can learn to reconnect, sounds like she's dying and he wont have to worry about breaking her heart for much longer anyway. Once she's gone he'll realize ...they say hindsight is 20/20 especially when its too late.

[Anonymous]

Wow, I loved this prospective piece. Really great read.

[Karen Redburn]

Oh my gosh, this made me cry. I do hope they can reconnect before anything happens to either one of them. Regret is a horrible thing to live with.

[Moonie]

Quite melancholic...I love how you went about with his emotions...this story definitely works! Good writing!

[Hannah]

Very difficult subject matter in this story. Very melancholy.

[marilyn 1225]

wow you want to leave her for a new someone well that does happen but yet , when you are with her you are so happy to have her and be together.. that also happens... will a choice be made that is up to you, and you alone ... sad yet affirmative piece nice writing !!

[J. Hampton]

I read this through and am uncertain of my separating metaphors implications etc...which of course makes it all the more compelling as I did read it three times...if the ambiguity is intended
2 thumbs up and if not...????
well crafted

[Carolann Dowsett]

So much sad truth in this.

[Diane]

sad. Even more when one of them is dying. Heart breaking.

[SM Davis]

Strength. It speaks of strength both that which is possessed and desired. Well done.

[DIVYA]

There comes a time when a couple become such a part of each other, they can guess each other's thoughts before stated in words, like she seems to have done here. Perhaps, only perhaps, will he be able to find such togetherness again. A sad and thoughtful story.