Chapter 2

Chapter 2 Matt's Point of View

   I opened the door and found a girl, about my age, standing in  
front of me.

   "Hey!" I said, smiling.  She just stood there, mouth gaping open.

   "Is there a problem?"

   "Uh... I uh..."

   "You... What?"  I looked at her curiously.  She was pushing her  
light brown bangs out of her face and tucking them back into her  
ponytail.

   "Matt? Who is it?" my mother called.

   I hesitated. "Um... Her name is..."

   "Tessa," the girl stated.  She no longer looked shocked or  
frightened.  Now she had a huge grin on her face.

   "Tessa.  Nice name."

   She blushed, and I immediately regretted saying that.

   "My name is Matt," I said, sticking out my hand.  Tessa shook it.   
Then my mom came to the door.

   "Oh! Tessa! Your mom told me so much about you, but now I get to  
meet you in person!"  My mom pulled her into a hug, and Tessa's face  
turned bright red.

   "Is there anything we can help you with, my dear?" my mom asked.

   Tessa nodded. "My mom needs some flour, if you've got any."

   "Of course we do! I'll just go grab some," she said, wandering  
off.  My eyes were focused on Tessa's, and she was looking away,  
blushing.

   "Okay okay, I'm back! And here's your flour!"

   "Thank you Mrs. Strauss!" Tessa said. Then, with one look at me,  
she walked away.

   Dang.

   That girl has just got something about her.

Reviews

[zing]

I like the change in point of view from Tessa to Matt. It gives an interesting spectrum for getting to know the characters. Part of me expected Matt to be a little shy or socially awkward (being that he lives on a farm and likely in a rural community) but instead he seems charismatic. I suspected that he might feel the same way about Tessa, and I'm interested to see how, when, and or if they describe these feelings to one another.

I didn't see any gramatical errors, so all of that looked good. One slight suggestion I do have, though, is that you might want to make the chapters a little bit longer. They're too short, the only problem with that being as soon as the reader gets interested in the the character's mindset, we get pulled away and put into someone new.

[werejustcountrygirls]

@Adalynn

Thank you:) I just recently updated Chapter 6 PART 2 today, and I hope to be updating again by next week (if not sooner)

[Adalynn]

I read the prologe and chapters 1 and 2 your a talented writer. I cannot wait to read more..

Adalynn

[Jamie Raintree]

This was really cute! I liked seeing things from Matt's point-of-view. I would love to know what he sees when he looks at her and how he's reacting to her. And, again, some more description. I'm enjoying the story so far!