Stripped

Stripped

A Poem by duff
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Think about those hello’s

You can always roll back

Red suited lipstick below

Moving desert with black

A heartbeat of two hands

Buys a place in the sand

Diamond candy and pain

Doesn’t need your name

Strobe lights over stacks

Own stars fading mellow

The beats lack the attack

Swallowing up the yellow

The marquee never dies

Lust is an architect game

Dreams don’t need spies

Temptation builds a frame



© 2017 duff



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Red and black- roulette wheel of life perhaps? " a heartbeat of two hands buys a place in the sand..Diamond candy and pain.." knife-sharp words and images.."strobe lights over stacks" on the "Strip".Speed drives beat and flow here- adrenaline rush- evocative of gambling "lust"-Play! Risk! 'You have to be in it to win it.' "Temptation builds a frame"-Dealer wins all...Wicked great my friend!



Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

3 Months Ago

Thank you Annette for a wonderful review! Sin City:)



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Red and black- roulette wheel of life perhaps? " a heartbeat of two hands buys a place in the sand..Diamond candy and pain.." knife-sharp words and images.."strobe lights over stacks" on the "Strip".Speed drives beat and flow here- adrenaline rush- evocative of gambling "lust"-Play! Risk! 'You have to be in it to win it.' "Temptation builds a frame"-Dealer wins all...Wicked great my friend!



Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

3 Months Ago

Thank you Annette for a wonderful review! Sin City:)
This strikes me as a vignette of Las Vegas as it provokes thoughts of rolling die, painted women, buying beach side property, the glitz and diamond clad women, stacks of chips and the lust of greed and dreams of riches. As always a tightly constructed painting.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

4 Months Ago

Thanks John. I did go kinda cliche on it but I wanted to capture what the strip it typically known .. read more
This was very rad, and upbeat as well as enticing...whom had crossed your path, that set your heart beating...Makes me want to ask...a touch of romance, and leading to temptation...
Truly like the flow of this. You are indeed a great writer, my friend, do not ever doubt it. I truly enjoy reading your work.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

4 Months Ago

Thanks Maria! What kicked this off was the initial thought of Las Vegas and kind of kept going from.. read more
Maria

4 Months Ago

Wow, really so neat. Totally get the whole thing...Great writing job indeed.
Very fast paced, I liked the rhyme scheme.
This would make a nice dubstep song.
Well done!

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

6 Months Ago

I like the sound of that! Thank you!
Bluefire

2 Months Ago

You're welcome

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