Mental Health

Shall I mourn for the loss of my body

For it exists beyond my control now

I am nothing but a passenger

Shall I rejoice in the diminished responsibility

For I will always know the actions were not mine

I am the criminal and the crime yet never the witness

White water rapids of confusion refuse to be grasped or held

Rapid painful strokes of sanity flash from the abyss

When your life is a flickering light bulb

Reviews

[frivolous treasures]

Mmm what a deliciously dark and enlightening poem (if that makes sense lol) this is!

"I am the criminal and the crime yet never the witness" (aren't we all!)

"...When your life is a flickering light bulb" (what a splendid line!)

Oh, I enjoyed this greatly. Aren't we all a little mental, no matter how 'sane' we may think we are?

[Blue Belle]

This is really quite interesting to think about. Love, reading your poems.

[Mark Anthony Games (Human Voice)]

Thank you

[Rogue]

This is extremely descriptive and thought provoking.

"I am the criminal and the crime yet never the witness"

This line is really outstanding. Once read, not easily forgotten.

[Mark Anthony Games (Human Voice)]

The only time things got worse is during the acceptance phase, when you became the witness to actions performed by your body that you could not control. Thank you

[Lucy Morningstar &heart..]

This hits really close to home with me and brought a wonderful tear to my eye. Beautiful, absolutely beautiful :)

[Mark Anthony Games (Human Voice)]

Thank you, This is one of my favorite works. Was a little upset that it got little attention lol.

[Lucy Morningstar ♥]

it deserves a ton :)

[Mark Anthony Games (Human Voice)]

Well if you have just started writing then you will learn that stuff you thought was good is actually not and stuff you thought was rubbish people will think is good. Gaining Consciousness was written in about 5 mins and I thought it was substandard, but has proved to be my most reviewed. Although I have grown to like it. Thank you again