So, Mote It Be

So, Mote It Be

A Poem by Manda A.
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A page taken from my journal written May 2005. Revised and titled May 2009.

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Feelings sprout me
Squeeze me dry
As it would have it
A well springs from my eyes

The rapture from this belly
So drives my very soul
Out
Into the open it goes
I’m all alone, so

No one knows


 

And she said, through the mistrust and the vanity and the hatred, the ignorance and the egotistic nature:

“What if I truly am evil, as though politicians and the authorities and the Lord Himself might claim me to be?”

With a grim, wide-spread smile and furrow of her brow she calmly, clearly states:

“Then so it be.

'I am what I was born to. I did not ask to be this way…”

 


© 2009 Manda A.



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Okay you said not to over-analyze your work or I might go insane. I started to go down that route and pulled back. I decided it was better to give you my first impression. First part of the story to me was about rebirth or escape, casting aside the flesh to be free. Protag (which I'm not sure fits in here) is about arrogance. So that drove me to the title. I say the punchline is this is a write as a duo together orchestrate a throwback at God for feeling insignificant.
Mote (defined as a speck of dust)
I guess that's it. What's a Mote to you?

Interesting. I could be WAY off base. That's why I love reading your work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Okay you said not to over-analyze your work or I might go insane. I started to go down that route and pulled back. I decided it was better to give you my first impression. First part of the story to me was about rebirth or escape, casting aside the flesh to be free. Protag (which I'm not sure fits in here) is about arrogance. So that drove me to the title. I say the punchline is this is a write as a duo together orchestrate a throwback at God for feeling insignificant.
Mote (defined as a speck of dust)
I guess that's it. What's a Mote to you?

Interesting. I could be WAY off base. That's why I love reading your work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The title evoked (maybe I'm being too literal here) either Wicca or Masonic imagery. I'm guessing Wicca to some degree. Not trying to overanalyze, just hoping my interpretation is right. Is it?

If so, this seems to convey a struggle of the powerful female. I sensed the protag being surrounded by scorn and ignorance, typical throughout history.

This is a great piece. But I have to say it......if the above is correct in interpretation I wish the ending would have been more of a rebellion than a compromise. You seem to accept the scorn of others when you almost apologetically admit to "being born this way". Screw that. The character I read is a goddess. One that should rage against the ignorance of others and celebrate who she is.

Don't have the goddess type apologize.

Sorry to be so intrusive, but wanted to leave some honest feedback. Do keep in mind that I think this piece is REALLLLLLLY good. I just wanted to see the "goddess-gal" kick a little a*s.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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