Drowning

Drowning

A Poem by theshygirl
"

You make me feel like drowning.

"

D r o w n i n g

 

As I gasp for air

and look for words to describe your way of saying something

 without a transparent wave of sound.

 

My body tries to protect itself and I involuntarily hold my breath.

But the thought of your appearance of a perfectly imperfect in and outside

Takes my breath away.

 

Losing my consciousness as I see the moving motions become motionless.

My love my heart seems so full of you.

As my head tries to erase.

The beat of my heart lost his rhythm and all I could see turns black like everything used to.

 

As I am sinking down to the bottom of this endless river of feeling something true.

I am a victim of your love.

Drowning myself in memories of you.

 

  - L.D.C

 

 

 

 

 


© 2016 theshygirl



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theshygirl
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Awwwww!!!! This is gorgeous.....This is called burning passion of love.....You just simply made me feel the feelings of this poem.....Every line of this poem is full of love.....Absolute class....Its like 'Drowning' in the river of love......Full ratings my frnd....Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!.....

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

theshygirl

1 Year Ago

awe thank you so much




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This poem is very vivid and it helped me feel the emotion this piece was conveying. I absolutely love this!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

theshygirl

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much dear 😊
Drawing in your love tonight no escape no better way to have gone to heaven but to be dying for your love.

Posted 1 Year Ago


I love those last two lines. You penned this perfectly miss shygirl :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


theshygirl

1 Year Ago

Thank you sooo muchh!
I hardly ever read but the way you use words to connect memories and emotions is very vivid and real and makes me want to read more. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

theshygirl

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much , i have been dealing with some stuff lately and needed to blow off some steam read more
Great job I really feel the emotion pouring out of each line keep up the great work!

Posted 1 Year Ago


theshygirl

1 Year Ago

Thank you soooo muchh
Love is at the core every human being and thinking of someone makes love more beautiful. Your poem and 'i am a victim of your love', this line, is simply entwined in an imperfect, yet clear, domain of new-generation write up. Good one. Like it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

theshygirl

1 Year Ago

Thank you sooo much!
I really love this poem!! It explains the feelings of true love for someone, and every line that I read I felt it. Great Job!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


theshygirl

1 Year Ago

Thankssss 💖
i really like it. i truly do. i am not just sugar coating it.

Posted 1 Year Ago


theshygirl

1 Year Ago

Glad that you like it !
I feel as if I am drowning in the words of your poem. They are short and yet meaningful. I'm drowning! :) Great work! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


theshygirl

1 Year Ago

thank you soo muchh

xxx
TheMalady

1 Year Ago

You're welcome! :)
Awwwww!!!! This is gorgeous.....This is called burning passion of love.....You just simply made me feel the feelings of this poem.....Every line of this poem is full of love.....Absolute class....Its like 'Drowning' in the river of love......Full ratings my frnd....Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!.....

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

theshygirl

1 Year Ago

awe thank you so much


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