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About me

About me

A Poem by J. Storm
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A little bit about the person behind the screen

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Behind my eyes is a man wrapped in guilt, Twisted and torn by regret, anger and pain.
There's a war that rages on behind a face masked with a smile.
It builds within me and penetrates my heart and soul. 
A cloud of mistrust and hatred guides my emotions and defines my relationships. 
Rejection etched so deep the marks it left can't be filled.
Pain so fully entwined in how I grew up so happiness and pleasure confuse me and makes me hostile.
Now let me tell you,
I see light penetrating through the darkness. 
I see beauty in the chaos, I see the intoxicating effect of laughter and smiles.
There's an echo in the darkness I hear and feel.
It resonates through me leaving me scared and withered. 
I can stand and face it instead of running because....I see you

© 2018 J. Storm



Author's Note

J. Storm
I am not a professional write I use this to let some steam off

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Honest question. How are you not a professional writer?!
This poem is filled with so much emotion, and it really makes the reader feel, and that is one of the main keys to poetry. you're use of vocabulary and everything fits in so well with the poem, and makes it more fluent, and graceful. It's well paced, and overall a really good read!

A word of advice...I can see that you wanted to put emphasis to 'I see you.' Another way you can do that, is my putting it on another line, or stanza. Maybe even indenting it to the right, or putting italics on it. You don't have to follow it, since it is poetry and there really are no rules to poetry.

Really good job!

Posted 5 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

J. Storm

5 Months Ago

I've only written a few things I guess is why I say I'm not a professional write. I never took any c.. read more



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Every word in that poem,touched my heart.

Posted 5 Months Ago


It's chilling how much I was able to relate to this poem. Definitely a high standard for this site, since it is the first one I've read. Fantastic writing :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Honest question. How are you not a professional writer?!
This poem is filled with so much emotion, and it really makes the reader feel, and that is one of the main keys to poetry. you're use of vocabulary and everything fits in so well with the poem, and makes it more fluent, and graceful. It's well paced, and overall a really good read!

A word of advice...I can see that you wanted to put emphasis to 'I see you.' Another way you can do that, is my putting it on another line, or stanza. Maybe even indenting it to the right, or putting italics on it. You don't have to follow it, since it is poetry and there really are no rules to poetry.

Really good job!

Posted 5 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

J. Storm

5 Months Ago

I've only written a few things I guess is why I say I'm not a professional write. I never took any c.. read more
I see light penetrating through the darkness.
I see beauty in the chaos, I see the intoxicating effect of laughter and smiles.
There's an echo in the darkness I hear and feel.

TOTALLY love this part, Awesome here!

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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J. Storm
J. Storm

Roy, UT



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