...Today I say goodbye...

Today I let my tears tumble

For they tell what I won’t say

I don’t want you to see my pain

So I wait till you turn away

 

Today I let the smiles fade

For they lie of a happy life

I can’t share this pain with you

So I will share it with the knife

 

Today I show how I really feel

For this time I’m not alright

I battle to find the will to live

Would you care if I lose that fight?

 

Reviews

[Natalie C]

Very simple piece and yet one can't ignore the powerful message and emotions displayed here.

Describing life as you see it, as you feel it in almost an innocent, child like manner making this piece even more forceful to your readers, knowing that a child is dying inside, a person who still has so many greater things waiting for her in life.

Wonderfully said, I really did enjoy wrapping my mind around this one!

[~crazy Beautiful~]

oh self inflicted pain is hard to read
this piece is so sad
no one is worth your life
no matter how you feel somebody loves you
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[justink :):)]

WELL i realy liked this one kudos to you.........
justintime

[xlynne]

wow this was a very powerful poem. serious kudo's! it was very deep and moving

[Marie]

I thought it was written very well.

[Tessa Le Rouge]

very emotional, especially when a cutter reads this. if you are going through this, im here. great write, love. keep it up.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

I don't want you to see my pain, and so I wait till you turn away, such sad verses How often we try to hide our tears and our emotions. Awesome poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A very moving piece....well written.

[Amy Bromes]

Very nice... you have a good talent for writing
what you feel.

Amy B.

[Amor-de-angel]

Such a sad piece. glad these feelings have gone now. Good write