I Know How To Fix It

i hurt someone close to me and this was all that came to mind at the time................i took a while but now we are getting it sorted out and we are friends again although i doubt they will forgive me..........it still hurts me imeasurably knowing i hu

Things were said that cut so deep

Words of venom red rivers seep

Cold torn hearts, engraved on wrists

Blood stained blades held in loose fists

 

None was meant to cause this pain

To bring new scars and tears like rain

A promise to live will stop me now

A new year’s start will break that vow

 

Forgive and forget the mistake of me

I’m a waste of space and you agree

These words don’t count or so you think

As you sit by and watch me sink

 

I’m sorry for all the mistakes and hurt

Burn me now I’m not worth the dirt

So much pain and you never cried

I fixed the problem when I died…

 

Author's Note

this was what i was feeling would fix it at the time and sometimes i still feel it mite........i cant hurt people if im not here to do it...........

Reviews

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

Rachal that is not the answer.....without known what went on I can only coment on this piece. You pour so much pain into your writing.....If it help then write your way through it.....even if it makes no sense to anyone else. On the piece itself very powerful.

[Sarah]

I really enjoyed reading this poem. You took a popular topic and made it original, which was wonderful to read! I really loved the line "A new year's start will break that vow", in particular. I'm very sorry that you were feeling this way, but as everyone else said, cutting isn't the answer. Writing really good poetry, such as this, is a much better idea. (: Great job & keep writing!

[justink :):)]

that is not the answer .....why dont you write how you feel you could write a very good book......

[Celtic Cat]

Well, mistakes are made all the time, and the people closest to us often feel our wrath... I'm hoping the other party is big enough to realize this and forgive and forget. Worthwhile friendships are not born every day, and certainly not to be taken lightly. As for messing up, forgive yourself, regardless of what the other party does. Just don't die, there's tons of people on this planet.... although I know how it feels when losing one seems like losing all... remember: feelings are NOT facts. Hang tough and stay strong. good write, by the way.

[Gary H]

This is obviously very impactful and shows a lot of pain. I'm hoping in the process of writing this that those feelings stay with the words and you can move on.
As far as the poem stands I thought you could perhaps have made it more powerful by mixing the verses. For example -
Things were said that cut so deep
None was meant to cause this pain
Words of venom, red rivers seep
To bring new scars and tears like rain
However, I fully undertsand that was not the point of writing it. Keep moving on and forward. Who knows what will happen next.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Never give up, and remember you are worth, it's just a hard time you're going through. Debileah

[Amor-de-angel]

We all screw up sometimes...it's part of learning. But this poem must help you get those feelings out.
Write it all out and move on,knowing that you can stop and think about your actions before making any mistakes again.
Life was never meant to be easy I am sure of that.
Be strong and don't give up.