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Got the inspiration from a song.

I’m going to keep spreading this message even if it kills me

To stop is something I’m refusing

Put your head up, open your eyes

Don’t be afraid to be you, wear no disguise

Keep climbing till you reach the top

Don’t worry about the haters cause for them it’s going to be a scary drop

This is for you and me

It’s ok to live out your dreams

Disagree? Ok feel free

Trust, I won’t for you to listen to me

I may be only sixteen but I’ve learned a lot in this life

One thing I know is life is full of strife

But you have to learn and push through it

This is your life; you’re the one who controls it

It doesn’t matter what you look like

Each and every person has a light

It doesn’t matter what you you’ve been through

It’s irrelevant what you see when you look outside your window

Picked fence or barb wire

Are your hands already raised? Oh well then raise them higher

I may be five six but I swear I feel like I’m six eight

Now let my words be like a switch blade to a haters ribcage

 

 

Author's Note

This poem is not done. I have to make like a little chorus and then write down the other half..... well tell me what you think so far.

Reviews

[Alewis]

great write

[Raven Starhawk]

This write is very good. I think you did a excellent job in penning this.

[Don Shaw]

I like it, keep up the good work.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Certainly has a nice rythm and melodic nature to it....so far brilliant...love the message too...which gives it a nice backbone....excellent :)

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

i liked it so far and cant wait to read the rest... there is always gonna be haters and we just need to be the bigger person...

[Brenden Moran]

It is a good poem but something I would consider is cleaning up the flow a little more especially with the biggest line in the poem. I'd also take a look at maybe adjusting your poem to have some more rhymes because the ones you have already are pretty good. I like that you take a little bit of a different spin on a common topic. Keep up the good work:)

[Dove]

Thank you for the review everyone:) I really appreciate them.

[(☞ﾟヮﾟ)☞Emmett..]

This is really good so far. Haters gonna hate! xD I can't wait to read the final product. I like the last two lines... hehehehe, shanking haters metaphorically. Awesome.

[Rakesh Roushan]

so this far is so good.. You need not make it sound chorus, its already so well .. I will be waiting to read the rest half

[stars are far]

Nice poem ..
i loved that :)