Stand Off

peace

 

Stand Off

 

 

I challenge others, often not myself.
To justify what’s right from wrong.
A perception perceived from indifference.
This resentment I've longed.
If a solution is not placed on the table

 Can a house divided win?

If unable to look within

My discord can’t be resolved

If we can’t see eye to eye

Or put aside that dreadful sin

 We often, call pride.

With valiant valor and some aggression,

The strongest leaves the last impression.

With concessions, unwilling to concede,  

Only weakens the stand,

That we are all created Equal.

Remember,

 The needs of many

 Far outweigh that of one

And a lack for empathy will be the downfall

To cloud above

 A basic understanding of integrity

 Through compassion and love

For the greater good

A common goal,

We should humble and cherish

For it has been told

From many generation long ago

Plant the seed

For what you reap you sow

And that will live

within your hearts and soul. 

By Mauricio Montoya

 

 

Author's Note

I’ve been stuck working on this piece for a month, your input is always greatly appreciated,
I’m a member of a club and sometimes people want to impose what they think is right without thinking of others and it happens everywhere

Reviews

[Celeste21]

The first line is gold. How often do we all challenge others and pick out what is wrong with everyone else. We turn the finger on ourselves at times but sometimes not to the same degree and sometimes we are even more harsh with other people. Sigh.. the ability to be understood, a constant quest.

"Oh, the comfort, the inexpressible comfort of feeling safe with a person, having neither to weigh thoughts nor measure words, but pouring them all out, just as they are, chaff and grain together, certain that a faithful hand will take and sift them, keep what is worth keeping, and with a breath of kindness blow the rest away.” -Dinah Craik

[Kenneth The Poet]

This is a call to love all, even though you may not get along with them. Better to love from afar sometimes. Nice work here.

[Fran Marie]

a power-packed and deeply expressed poem....we're all created equal...none better than the other and compassion is all so important...nice writing here..

[❀ Gabriela ..]

Very powerful piece! I love how you put this, and I really liked those last lines especially. Excellent!!

[MOON]

Stand off, love the title a challenge to do what's right , to keep peace foremost in our hearts. We are all created equal yet how little we accept this.

[lee von cleef]

the words or the message or the philosophy , the devil in me ,curiosity, many or one?
who can see? the lemming in the middle ,or way off to the side ? Maybe we are all supposed to go over the Cliff ? Just a thumb tack for your shoe.

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Beautiful thoughts, dear poet :)

[rae52]

really good

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Me guastaria!

[Ruth]

So true! We must challenge ourselves....it is paramount love! And other's opinions are worth considering and respecting but when it leads to control....we need to question, always! xx

[Shellie]

Very wise words you have here. Its a very well written polished poem. Great Job.