Beautiful Sunset

Beautiful Sunset

A Poem by TJ
"

Bittersweet farewells. Find the joy in every goodbye.

"

Beautiful Sunset

 

 

 

A beautiful sunset

What a beautiful sunset

 

Ignore all your sorrows

hold back your tears

your soul may despair

but it's a beautiful sunset

 

do not fear the ends

the pain of farewell

try to take in

this beautiful sunset

 

our life is like earth

going through its seasons

moving on its own terms

to its beautiful sunset

 

although it may seem so

it never happens too soon

things always will end

at their beautiful sunset

 

what a glorious day

so hard to let go

but just try to enjoy

this beautiful sunset

 

sunrise


© 2011 TJ



Author's Note

TJ
So this is my second shot at poetry and I think it is, somehow, worse than my first. Regression!
Anyways here it is! have at it! advice is welcome :)

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I did prefer your first poem, but this is not bad.
Repetition of a phrase adds strength to a poem and this is no exception.
Some small spelling errors - last stanza - glorious for example.

Again, flows fairly well. With a little more time the kinks can be ironed out.

Posted 7 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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Most people always see the bad side of goodbyes and I am one of them. This poem made me see the other side of it. I really appreciate the element of repetition throughout the poem. It was a good read.

Posted 4 Years Ago


A pleasure to read, true and from the heart. Thank you, keep writing!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Maybe instead of saying "a beautiful sunset" over and over, try to describe its beauty.

Posted 5 Years Ago


I think i can ,I think I can, I can! Thank you for reminding me of the gifts today.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I think its fine. And it speaks truth. We need to live in the moment. Enjoy the sunset.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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CJ
No kinks, this just is itself..how life is. Poetry is neither technical or intellectual. It just is.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Don't you worry about it, try to show some secrecy and different images to keep the reader interested, nice job

Posted 6 Years Ago


Repitition. It does not regress. Nor does it proceed. It has the makings of warmth yet subtle coldness. I applaud it's soul. Overall: Good work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Nice and peaceful sunset......

Posted 7 Years Ago


No poem can be bad if it comes from the heart :-)

Posted 7 Years Ago



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TJ
TJ

Virginia Beach, VA



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