Aged Love

 

 

His hands-- coarse,

Outlined sagging skin.

Years of time passing

Made them both feel weathered.

His touch held her gently, thus

Reminding her how grateful she was.

For he was the painter of the canvas of her soul

Leaving fingerprints on her temples.

 

 

Her hands--weak

Brushed against aging flesh.

Years of time passing

Made them both feel weathered.

Her touch reassured him strongly, thus

Reminding him how grateful he was.

For she was the sculptress of his once hardened heart,

Leaving footprints on his chest.

 

 

In their hands they found all they needed.

Through their touch the years melted and age disappeared.

They thanked God that He made them for each other in this life... 

Author's Note

Just something different than my norm.

Reviews

[Steffi]

Aw i really liked this one.
The way you took the same lines almost but changed them to fit for both the older man and the older woman was a wonderful touch to the piece. :D

[dennis king - peace poe..]

whenever i see an elderly couple on the street, i just can't help but be amazed. i really hope i find someone i can be with for that long...

why? because dying alone *sucks.*

[Mountain Dawn]

Beautiful work. Very touching. Anxious to read more.

[ELii]

so beautiful....To only wish for this love, maybe one day.... Lovely write....words flowed with grace.

[forfila]

This is beautiful, oh to be blessed by such a love it becomes timeless. Really, this one has my heart =)

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[R J Askew]

It's very original. I can't recall such a poem about to aged lovers. And you pull it off with great tenderness. It feel accurate. There must be a zillion poems about young love here everyday but none to match this one. And yet with western populations ageing why not? In a way the subject of the poem is very optimistic and the line by line execution is definitely optimistic. But the main feeling is one of humanity, between the two lovers and in you. I reckon many elderly poem would read this poem and feel ten years younger.