Second Guess-ing

We have all been here....

 

Sunsets and blue wishes, brilliantly skated across my mind,

Flirting with hazel moments of days long gone, bye...

Captured under the blushing sky, winking.

I spent those minutes thinking.

Different endings, perhaps? Caught in an once golden sun,

Buried under layers of clouds, left undone.

Amber burning embers of moon glow, peeking through...

Captured candy coated whispers that once came from you.

Poignantly, time slipped off my wrist and faded,

At our old spot, I still waited,

Wishing for memories' burn to sting less,

As I sit on the steps of second guess-ing...

Reviews

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You've painted a delicious portrait with your hues and your images; they complement the wistful mood of the poem perfectly.

of days long gone, bye...

The use and placement of the comma here is clever.

time slipped off my wrist and faded...

Another clever image.

in an once golden sun

should be "a once golden..." unless I'm thick and missing something here...

Great short write, splendid for brightening a rainy, bleak Sunday morning. Thanks.

[Travis Lawrence]

Great, great poem. I've been there, for sure, in that reflection. I'm so glad I read this.

[Rain]

The love the way you have mixed colors with the mood of the piece. It is so true; we have all been there, but not all of us can paint it as beautiful as you. Rain..

[Kara Emily Krantz]

i THINK there's a couple typos here - or things you meant to word a little differently, (spotted?) but you might catch them with a read-thru/edit. :) you have some great images here, and the flow was really nice.

"Amber burning embers of moon glow, peeking through...

Captured candy coated whispers that once came from you."

that was probably my favorite part of the piece. :) and gosh i love that idea of time slipping off one's wrist - great one there

hugs