death lives

..senryu.

• • death lives 

    
    

    the air was blowin', 

    'slips through my veins saying that 

    I'm just nobody. 

    
    

    Never was alone 

    'fore lie revealed the truth 

    life's but a cold wind. 

    
    

    I've learned the laughter 

    they created tears to fall 

    burst of faith was born. 

    
    

    Earth's a shattered mess 

    of greed, pain and shallowness

    world of foolishness. 

    
    

    Nature of man's deeds 

    beneath a darkened dungeon 

    hanging by a thread. 

    
    

    Dark heart still hardened 

    when coins slap a wishing well 

    then a curse was found. 

    
    

    Let this bad dream end 

    though my heart now stops to beat 

    'coz death takes rebirth. 

    
    

    -musicfunk-

Reviews

[Marie]

Meets the form of haiku. Interesting concept.

[Amata Luna]

It's simply poetic and true. Death lives. Maybe not just the physical way but even with emotions. Your use of words is just good. Nice one musicfunk. You did well... again. :)

[CHRIS ANDES]

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