Inner Demise

You don’t know the magnitude of the pain you’re putting me through.

You don’t know the pain of saying the words I love you.

How it burns my inner core just looking at you.

Can you feel its intensity as it pours off me blazing right through to you?

 

I shudder to think of what you’re capable of.

But then maybe I shouldn’t.

Seeing as it should be, when thinking/looking at you makes me despise myself for what you put me through.

I’ve seen enough of you that im betting my life you’re wicked.

Truly a devil in disguise, with me, none the wiser.

As you snake up to me and watch me slumber.

You slowly poison me with death defying remarks

As you make your way into the city marks.

 

You  slither your way right into my life

Sneaking up to me and making me your wife.

How could you do that when you of all people know

I’d give up everything not to let it show

The things you’ve m ade me become and what I know

I had your back far too many times but not anymore

I’d die to feel you in my arms again, and I’ll be at fault

For I can never trust someone with your scathing assault.

 

Reviews

[Gus McFarland]

I like the style in this, Topsyturvy

Your use of words such as, "You make your way into the city marks", brings writing to the art you have created. A painter uses color in thier work. We use words to paint our picture. Your words show as much feeling as any painting.

Gus.

[Michael X]

wow! simply, loved this, it's one of those reads that is brilliant, and in general, i'm sure many people can relate. the meaning, i feel to the core.

[Eagle Cruagh]

I missed the part where you like this guy !

Did it ever happen ? Do you just live in
torment, or did I just miss the love part ?

Well, I often miss something, but I still
know a good poem when I see it and this
is a real winner.

Rated-----100 %

-----Eagle Cruagh

[deeps]

"I've seen enough of you that im betting my life you're wicked.
Truly a devil in disguise, with me, none the wiser."

I so love these lines here and then you go and top it off by saying

"You slither your way right into my life
Sneaking up to me and making me your wife."

So awesome, Such emotion here, So well expressed!
Your words just flow, Very talented.