was thinking about how life is full of contemplation and how contemplation can lead to void and vain....this poem is the result. sorry, i know it's random but...yeah
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I love how it is so descriptive! Very juicy words, I can just imagine that single 'petal whirling in the wind'.
Great job!
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
thank you, Chain! honestly I don't know what to call you :)) yeah that petal is having a very long j.. read morethank you, Chain! honestly I don't know what to call you :)) yeah that petal is having a very long journey even until now haha.
9 Years Ago
Haha, and my name's Leanna. I've always liked the phrase, 'Chain of Hearts', so I decided to make it.. read moreHaha, and my name's Leanna. I've always liked the phrase, 'Chain of Hearts', so I decided to make it my 'writing' username. :)
This is absolutely breathtaking. I can't seem to explain the way that it made me feel. It was such an intense assessment of contemplation, and it almost seems to say that thinking too much about every occurrence can lead to you enjoying it much less. My favorite line is the "melancholic concourse of green", I just love that description. Keep it up, seriously. I was blown away by this one.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
thank you thank you Harley! I'm really glad to read your review! yes the way we perceive every situa.. read morethank you thank you Harley! I'm really glad to read your review! yes the way we perceive every situation can help us to get through, but thinking too much can drain our capability to enjoy even distressing moments. you got it right! hahah thank you very much for reading and reviewing! anyway if there's anything that seems not quite right about the grammar etc. just tell me. I'll be happy to listen as it will help me improve my writing :)
Wow! I could never write like that no matter how much I tried. It is so beautiful and has such amazing flow to it. I can read this poem as many times as I want but I know each time I do, I will still be completely full of awe and amazement!
It has such tenderness in its expression and such power in its meaning. This is really a very amazing poem. I really loved it. Thanks for sharing! :)
haha thank you very much, moonlight :) I'm sure everyone has their own writing style. I do hope this.. read morehaha thank you very much, moonlight :) I'm sure everyone has their own writing style. I do hope this poem can give a little inspiration for your writing. anyway, moonlight reminds me of my most favorite music, Clair de Lune xD ever heard of it? you should listen to it sometime :)) thanks again for reading and reviewing!
I still very much enjoyed this poem. Life is definitely full of contemplation. There are no boundaries to one's imagination, only the limits we ourselves place on it. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
thank you, Stephen. indeed imagination is a powerful property of human being. therefore it needs a m.. read morethank you, Stephen. indeed imagination is a powerful property of human being. therefore it needs a mindful, careful treatment. thank you too!
Wow really amazing poem, I have nothing to say for it.........it just blewed my mind amazing writing.......... :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
thank you bro! really glad you enjoyed it :)
9 Years Ago
See, I wasn't the only one. XD
9 Years Ago
hahaha V.FUNNY XD
9 Years Ago
Lol, look at my comment. Either my brain wasn't working, or I was blown away, and I'm pretty sure it.. read moreLol, look at my comment. Either my brain wasn't working, or I was blown away, and I'm pretty sure it was a combo of both.
9 Years Ago
hahaha thanks guys. I still need to learn much to write better poems, though. maybe you people can g.. read morehahaha thanks guys. I still need to learn much to write better poems, though. maybe you people can give me some good advice sometime :)
9 Years Ago
hahaha yeah will try my best to take advice from u XD
9 Years Ago
Yeah, no problem, and I agree. I'll help however I can, but I think your work is ultra better than m.. read moreYeah, no problem, and I agree. I'll help however I can, but I think your work is ultra better than mine and I'm going to keep having problems really giving you advice on it. I mean, I can give you advice on the thoughts behind it, but I can't (so far) really give advice.
9 Years Ago
as long as it can help improve my writing you're always welcome, Blade! ultra is such a strong word .. read moreas long as it can help improve my writing you're always welcome, Blade! ultra is such a strong word hahahah xD and yes, Overskilled, i'll also try to help if you need me to review your writings.
9 Years Ago
hahahha XD
9 Years Ago
Lol, okay, well, I and my good friend Salman here XD will help you out the best we can. Oh, Salman! .. read moreLol, okay, well, I and my good friend Salman here XD will help you out the best we can. Oh, Salman! Dude, holy crap! My story "What Can Happen In A Second" is #1 In popular writing! :D Lol
9 Years Ago
see mine bro XD
9 Years Ago
Lol, I will, give me a moment, I'm replying to emails XD
9 Years Ago
right away, Salman. and congrats for the achievement, Blade! gonna check that out too!
9 Years Ago
Thank you, but you didn't have too. (No sense in saying don't do it now, it's been done. XD) Thanks .. read moreThank you, but you didn't have too. (No sense in saying don't do it now, it's been done. XD) Thanks for it though. :P :)
This is twisted.
One the one hand I see contemplation and on the other hand it's levels.
I might be mistaken but aren't you discussing nature, child labour and the contrast b/w city life and country life?
Whatever this is, it is nothing short of amazing! :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
thank you, Ishita :) wow i didn't even think of child labour at the time i wrote this. you sure have.. read morethank you, Ishita :) wow i didn't even think of child labour at the time i wrote this. you sure have a broad mind! yes, sometimes life in the city gets overwhelming that the heart starts longing for a more rustic atmosphere haha. anyway, thank you for the awesome review!
It must be my brain is really screwed up today or something or maybe your poem is above my level or just really good, but I really liked this, I just don't know what to say. I'll send read requests to my friends to get this some good reviews for you. I do believe (this is for your Note For Reviewers) that contemplation is a good thing, but to much and then you over think things to the max or you get lost in your own head or you get depressed or like you said, you don't find whatever you seek out to find.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Hahaha thank you very much Blade! this is really an awesome help! that happens to me often. I end up.. read moreHahaha thank you very much Blade! this is really an awesome help! that happens to me often. I end up over think everything then get worried for no reason lol. I've been trying to develop a more positive mind. it's a difficult work, but I'm getting better. anyway, Thank you again for reading, reviewing and telling your friends! hope you have a good day!
9 Years Ago
No problem. Aside from my personal view on contemplation (that has nothing to do with the poem, I gu.. read moreNo problem. Aside from my personal view on contemplation (that has nothing to do with the poem, I guess...) I don't see how I helped very much... but no problem. :) And yes, that I think, is one of the most difficult struggles of mankind, to develop a positive mind. I hope you do too. :D
I'm 19 year old christian man who lives in Indonesia. Sometimes i find it difficult for me to explain my thoughts and emotions in a solid, organized way. I must admit, that's one weakness of mine that.. more..