The Chocolatiers

I will succumb now

to your helpless anger, your restlessness

since everything i touch turns into steel.

Distant turbines or some

coins,

just pick one that you will carry

in your everlasting transformation.

On the brink of harsh, unforgivable despair,

you bounced into your favorite odors.

Yes, i found you sitting there

with your silent, suddenly laid back manner;

A cup of good moccacino, chocolate bars,

golden Belgian pralines smearing the fragile air.

You inhaled a deep breath freely,

somnolent sunbeam whirled inside your lungs,

vanilla cream and cherries.

You sleepyhead.

What we've become, what we could not overcome,

we surrounded ourselves with birds and trees.

Perfect,as you would call it,

it was the best,

the most desperate we could do

and now you want to take it back.

I will succumb now

to your dreams, your shock .

You can hold my hand now.

Go on, this is now your town.

Friendly fountains, flocks of assorted tourists,

gift shops;

From the cafe table we start out our trip.

There are photographs today

of people, houses, and window panes.

So, everything is numb and everyone is rich.

Nothing more

than a thousand running marzipan horses.

You can hold my hand now.

Go on, this is now your town.

When ganache melts all mountains,

rocks are just

cashews and hazelnuts

and on a grey summer day

we'll tie the ribbons to keep it a secret:

the happy cape in everyone's hand.

Reviews

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

i think its really good.....
keep writing :)

[jonah]

hahah thank you very much, Salman!

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

How do u know my name ...

[jonah]

Blade mentioned your name in the comments on my another poem xD I thought you realized hahaha

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Ohhh I was shocked that how do u know my name XD

[The StoryTeller]

I think this was really good, it's almost like the narrator has a significant other he is with... and they were so happy that it was almost like paradise, and now they're so broken, that he's in a daze. The significant other has swapped almost immediately to being okay, but the narrator is still dazed, but will follow still. I don't know if I completely screwed that up or not. Anyways, great write. Your writing needs to be seen man. :))