Just A Body

The girl that laughed and played is a memory.

The girl that loved to live was a lie.

I do not plan to die because I am already gone.

I will not say goodbye because I have already left.

You see me walk around, but it is not me.

You treat me like I’m human, but I am not.

I am only the ghost of a girl I once was.

Reviews

[jaimebell]

Great poem, I really liked your decision to keep it vague and more about the actual fact of what is felt rather than why it is felt. Pieces like these are particularly enjoyable due to the fact that it allows us the readers to think about it and the meaning. Keep up the great work :)

[Treble]

Thank you so much! I actually didn't think about the fact that it'll make readers think more. I mainly did that on a whim and because it makes the piece more relatable. :D

[D]

It's probably one of the worst things that can happen to someone. Losing themselves, and thus becoming an empty shell. Or "Just a body" as the title says. What concerns this poem, it is great. My only so called desire would be to see a few lines about the reason of this "death" but I guess some more of your writing will reveal that :) nice work.

[Treble]

Hmm... the reason, you say? Could you expand on that? I don't quite know exactly what you mean...

[D]

The reason of letting oneself drift off. the reason of becoming just a ghost of what one once was.

[Treble]

I got that part, but what do you mean when you say that more of my writing will reveal that?

[D]

Well I thought since the "reason ' is not included here, maybe there's a piece of writing that does include it.

[Treble]

Ah, okay. I mean, if you read a few of my pieces, you might get a hint of the reason, but none of my pieces explicitly state it.

[D]

They don't have to. It's my duty as a reader to find it. lol.
:)

[Treble]

Haha, thank goodness. I'd rather not state my method of "death"... Heh heh...

[D]

Lol. I'm stalking your writing o.O hahahaha just kidding.

[Treble]

You can if you want, though. That kind of stalking isn't creepy. It's just plain sweet and awesome!

[D]

Oh... *blush * lol.

[Treble]

😳☺️😊🤗😀😃😛😜😝😂

[Aguilar]

Wow, I really enjoyed reading your poem. I myself feel the same way at times. I think anyone can relate to your poem as well.

[Treble]

Thank you so much! Yes, it was meant to be as vague as possible so it's relatable. Glad it worked! :)