Come Back

I miss you so,

Why did you have to go?

You said nothing and then turned away,

Left me alone and did not stay.

Why are you so mad?

You’re making me sad.

Come back to fix these scars,

Before it’s too late,

And we can no longer see the stars. 

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

Very sweet yet melancholic tone.....You have shown the position of a heart after being left away by the lover.....You have maintained simplicity throughout the poem....Full of true feelings......Well done my frnd.....Clappings!!!!.....Full ratings.....

[Annie Nicole]

Thank you!!
This isn't about a lover though, it's about my dad.

[Inject Positivity]

Im really sorry for that mate....But i think its still love, and its words full of truth.....

[Annie Nicole]

It's alright!

[David Marsden]

I look at this type of poetry as reading the poet's thoughts through personal experiences rather than trying to form an opinion. It seems to me that is what this is, a personal encounter.
I get the message and the last line is filled with emotion. To me it has an ambiguous meaning: to no longer look at the stars together because they don't have the same impact alone. Or no longer see the joys in life alone. Together the world is colourfu, alone the world is in black and white.
A lovely poem and the story rolls along. I like the rhyming couplets, the last one is broken pùrposely I suspect. The rythmn isn't perfect but I'm not sure if it's supposed to be. I take a poem to be how it is. I guess that's where the phrase poetic licence comes from. It's the meañing and emotion that matters and this poem has both.

[Annie Nicole]

Thank you so much! I appreciate it : )

[TigerSpirit]

I like the rhyming in this, couldn't find a rhythm, wasn't sure if that's how you wanted it, but the words are beautiful, written with real emotion :)

[AndrejPro]

Lovely poem, very nicely written.