Concussion

I had 6 concussions in the course of two years, and their presence is felt.

Constant squeezing, pressing it never really ends

Something so dark, so beautiful, so antagonizing

Something I love and hate

An excuse to puff, puff, pass

But at a price of my peace at night

Only to be removed temporarily never fully out of mind

Something so evil and confusing not even doctors have answers

How good should that feel?

Knowing someone who studies medicine their whole life

And i still have no cure

All results have turned bad, maybe this is my fate

Was I evil in another life?

Maybe Hitler or Genghis Khan

Not really sure, but I do know somethings wrong

To others I give my fortune for virtually no return

Something I've attempted my entire life just to earn

Flushed away like worthlessness in a ceramic bowl

Who knew “Sorry we cant help” is something I'm always told

After giving them everything I have a right to be upset

What will happen to me now? Im not sure whats next

To keep traveling down this barren road

Or to start my life anew

Look back on the past and just laugh

Thats what Im going to do

Author's Note

Let me know what I do well and what needs improvement!

Reviews

[Nene]

nice poem... I liked this line
Who knew 'sorry we can't help' is something I'm always told.... Even If taken away from the poem It's a meaningful line....

[sereenaoutloud]

Look back at the past and just laugh, thats what I'm going to do
I love this. You can't change what has already happened. A positive out look. nice write

[Mayank]

I recently met a stranger and he said he had concussions, but now he's completely fine, I think there would be some or other way... but this was nice write, you must enjoy wild and balanced life to live well.

[andrew mitchell]

A good write Ricky I enjoyed this and the line "To keep travelling down this barren road" I could feel that isolation ,all alone

[Nini]

Intriguing, interesting, and leads the reader to question themselves. Nice job.

[Chain of Hearts]

I loved the feeling of it...you really tell the story in an way that any person could understand.
Awesome!
-LK

[Ana B.]

Beautiful and empowering poem :) Love it!

[dan]

Ricky, Having had many concussions from sports a lot of this type of thinking is eerily memorable, though circumstances surrounding it are sometimes (mercifully) blank. I'm not sure if your intention was to use concussions as the driving force behind the write or to use it figuratively to represent something else, but you know what? The reader can read it and interpret it how THEY want to, part of poetry's allure...give the reader something on which to decide, a judgment call, options. A very strong write, Ricky! take care...dan

[Saddam]

Interesting and simple.
I enjoy reading it.

[nazia]

In simple words.. nicely done.. The expression as well as the vision of the topic