The Black Shack

The Black Shack

A Poem by Ricky Campbell

The little black shack
Sitting in the cornfield
Among the barrenness on the side of the road
Hides itself from the world
But is visible to me

it sits there in the light
In broad, open daylight
As black as the midnight sky

The purpose of this shack is unclear
For nothing sits inside of it
For it's just an empty shack
Or an eyesore on the side of the road

It's quite odd as to why someone would build it there
On the side of the road
Within the confines of a cornfield
And not store a thing inside of it

It's just like problems in our life
Taking up space in the side of our mind
Hiding from the rest of the world
And appearing as an eyesore to us

So do as you may with your "black shack"
Take whatever steps are needed
For mine is no longer a black shack
But now a pile of black ashes
Scattered around, and out of my mind.

© 2015 Ricky Campbell



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very well written it feels awesome when i take black shack=fear inner)
extremely well written
enjoyed reading it..peace out ..keep smiling :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


I know where Portage is. I now reside in Muskegon. This is a solid write, the black shack a metaphor for our own rubbish piles, our abandoned things. The eyesores in our lives. Well penned.

Posted 1 Year Ago


I like that you used a black shack to symbolize problems in peoples lives. At one point you say "in the side of our mind" I think you may have meant "inside of our minds" but I could be wrong. This was a really good poem with an unexpected strong message. keep up the good writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


I love how the black shack is not really about a black shack, but more of a metaphor for one's mind and thoughts. I really enjoyed this very much. Keep it up

Posted 1 Year Ago


This was an interesting read, and I loved the way the poem flowed as I read it. The images that were created in my mind were beautiful

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Eerie poems like this are my favorite. And this has it all: mystery, suspense, horror...
The poem also flows smoothly also and the theme is clearly there. Great job and I mean it.

Posted 2 Years Ago


I glad your black shack is in ashes. How long did that take.
Great write

Posted 2 Years Ago


Black Shack...I like it
Black shack field empty
Good descriptive piece...
Containing many thoughts and meaning
Thank you for sharing

Posted 2 Years Ago


beautiful message delivered with a perfect metaphors. good write.

Posted 2 Years Ago


This is indeed a very nice poem. The analogy of the black shack with the problems in one's life is a unique concept and I liked it a lot. Thank you for sharing. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago



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Added on March 31, 2015
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Ricky Campbell
Ricky Campbell

Portage, MI



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I am a 16 year old teen from a calm, quiet city. I have aspirations of publishing a book of poetry before I graduate high school, and would appreciate any feed back and tips! Also, if you would like m.. more..

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