The Raft on the Stream

As he sails his raft swiftly down stream,

The banks pass by, as quick as a dream.

Yet he does not see the currents stray from pleasant,

For the future's his focus, he's forgotten the present.

Reviews

[Lyr J. Thirsk]

Its very short but it doesnt need to be long to simply convey the temporal paradox of being high...the present is a blur and future is all that matters, because you want to forget the past, or rather, have it erased from your mind; you want only the ecstasy of the present on your fix, and the future is hell until your next fix, so thats all you are focused on. thats what I liked about this, though there were submissions with just as great imagery.

great job!

[Muhammad]

I don't know how you keep it so short and simple, yet so thought provoking. Big thumbs up!

[deeps]

This is really wondrful
I enjoyed this one

[Tears Forgotten]

really good.. the style is well placed and the meaning is also good.. keep writing....

[d. c. smith]

good choice in your metaphor of life. it's known, but not so known that it has become meaningless and dead. and it leaves the reader wanting more--how are things turning rough? why are things turning rough? why did you choose for the rafter to be so caught up in the future, as opposed to the past?