Thoughts on the Moon

Does she look at herself? In her grand liquid mirror?

If the waves were calmer, I suppose she'd see clearer.

It might get lonely, with only stars on both sides.

Together, they're the only light night provides.

But even the stars are sometimes a crowd.

So she uses the darkness, like her brother does clouds.

Reviews

[NicoSuave]

Great way to personify the moon. Good imagery. Interesting application of genders to the sun (male) and moon (female). The comparison between the two, as well as day and night, light and darkness, clouds and stars, creates a great structure and flow.

"Grand liquid mirror" was a wonderful phrase for the ocean. Your rhyming schemes are always solid and consistent.

[nora]

oh wow, this is a really beautiful peice. i mean, the whole personification of the moon is captivating.

'Does she look at herself? In her grand liquid mirror?
If the waves were calmer, I suppose she'd see clearer.'

this part is definetly my favorite :) the imagery is great. actually, the imagery is pretty good in the whole thing. anyway, great write :)

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

This is beautiful. Well done

[lanEpoo]

this is lovely...
i liked the rhyme scheme
i thought it was cute the way you used the moon and the sun,
as if to resemble a family.

[Muhammad]

This is deep man, I like it.

[deeps]

Hmm! Quite intriquing write here i must say
I like it, very well said

I like this poem, especially the part about the mirror and the personification, and the parallel to the sun you have at the end is quite effective. Very well done. I wish I could write poetry like you can, but I'm hopeless. Good luck with all your writing.