Who Wins

There seems to me to always be that little strand of hope

at the bottom of my heart, resting

Behind my fed up eyes are the tears I still cry

and  this anger that's been manifesting

For as much as I want there is just as much as I need

but even that never stopped me

I can't hold on yet I can't let go

so you'll just have to drop me

The weight of the blame is so much more than the shame

and we carry this load taking turns

No matter who ignites the flame, the heats always the same

and it burns

I can't win for losing, I'm no good at choosing

the things that are best and it shows

If I had my way, we would all be okay

but lets face it, that's not how this goes

I love you now like I loved you then

only this time I'm loving me more

If you can compete with that you know where I'm at

Please feel free to even the score

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

"I can't hold on yet I can't let go
so you'll just have to drop me"

that line is so poignant. the emotion there is most definitely felt. i really like how this piece evolves from a severe pain to the realization that you are the only person who can save yourself. loving yourself is the first step and you will only accept this person back if they learn to love you that much or more. great write!

[Mark]

Wow, you have a talent for rhyme and rhythm! It feels a little angry and a little regretful. Love that goes wrong, becomes some sort of competition.

[gggg]

Hope can be a terrible thing. Loving yourself more is the beginning of breaking free. Awesome poem!

[TL Boehm]

I love you now like I loved you then
only this time I'm loving me more

Yes. that's how it should be. Great write.

[gombeggar]

got some good work here but seems uneven

[Astro]

Think this one could be made into song. It seemed to have a rhythm to it that transcended the changing rhyme scheme.

[Perkele.7885]

'only this time I'm loving me more' This line speaks volumes to understanding the ultimate cure for your dilemma. You need to love you with strength before you can share yourself with others! You tackle complex issues in your writings, I like that about you! Another good work!

[Rahul]

Bonding of love, a thread of love. !
wonderful write..100/100

[Simon Welsh]

That little strand of hope can carry such a bruising weight. I love.

[Ency Bearis]

A great piece with such words to ponder.