a day with you

i just love this..im thinking of a loveteam..who?they are from big brother..

gray shirt,hair undone
sun rise, fine sand
eyes met, held my hand
birds chirped, the wind danced

i smiled, you stared
close my eyes, you're still there
sound laughter, a long walk
sun set, sweet talks

shoes on sand, the moon our light
love was our song, danced all night
hands intertwined, stared at each other
oh i swear, i could do this forever

Reviews

[Daydreamer54]

This last line is so swet and it's my favorite! i like the mood u created with this poem! keep up the good worl! :)

[Joshua Donahue]

i love this piece so much! the way its written, the words used, the emotion behind it, just...EVERYTHING! really great piece of art.

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"i smiled, you stared
close my eyes, you're still there
sound laughter, a long walk
sun set, sweet talks"
Ahh-Nice---my favorite verse:-)
this is a sweetly written magnificent poem!!!
I Love It!!!

james:-)

[Iota]

LOL yes I so agree can do it all night long. I love new love, holding hands, that feeling inside, the glow, the endless smiles, the exploring each others minds learning and enjoying every second never wanting to leave their side. Yes a perfect write.

[SenoritaAriii<3]

This poem is very nice, and I could picture everything you wrote so clearly, it's amazing!

[Cassiopia Summers]

Great job. I good easily picture the words and groupings of this poem. (:

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Another beautiful poem. I could picture the scene. Its like... I can't describe the simplicity in this. Great job!

[Dream Weaver]

Sweet write, it comes together nicely
soft and touching...and beautiful. U
did a great job with this piece.