I called

I called you to

let you know

I dreamed of you

last night.

 

You were

as graceful

as the day

I met you.

 

In my dream

your legs still

worked. You

were still able

to glide across

the stage.

 

You were

able to talk, to walk,

to sing. In my dream

I watched with

amazement as you

danced to a song

playing in your head.

 

Your hair glistened

like gold. There was

a sparkle in your eye.

It reminded of the old days.

 

I know you can’t call back.

But I’m sure the nurse will

call at noon and tell

if you were able to eat or not.

 

I can guarantee your mom

will call crying. You

may have survived, but

there are times when

you seem dead.

 

You can’t move,

you can’t sing,

you can’t talk

but I know you can hear

so I call

to let you know

I dream about you

    last night.

Author's Note

Sorry the font isn't working right. This never happened to me. This is a story.


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Jan 15, 2011

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I called

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Mar 2, 2011

· Poem of You
I called

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

Wow! This was a great write. When I first started reading the poem, I really didn't expect the themes that I came across as the poem progressed. The twist in the middle of the piece definitely took me by surprise, but I thought that the way you described the situation was really moving, and beautifully worded. A very emotional and very real piece. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[Tasha]

This is so sad, but you did an excellent job telling the story. It was very moving and beautifully worded. You did a wonderful job.

[sarah]

THIS IS SO SAD!!! but wonderful I really was moved by this great work!

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Such a sad poem, but I absolutely love it! I think this has found a place in my favorites :)

[Reborn A Phoenix]

WOW! this is a sad poem. and true in many ways. i loved it it i trully did.

[MandaBear]

well i can see why this placed first Great job!

[Brianna]

I really, really like this. I learn a lot from your poetry, and I'm happy to learn this also; how you started the story out making it seem like, in my head, that this person was just paralyzed from waist down or something, but as I kept reading, I realized the sad truth of it. Your writing never ceases to teach me something :p p.s.- I also like how at first, the setting takes me back to like Romeo and Juliet times, with romantic dances, and then it pulls me to modern times with the mention of phones and hospitals. :)

[Margaret Marie Hubbard]

So sad but so honorable.

[DalainaRenee]

Dreams are a wonderful place we can all call our own. And anything can happen. I enjoyed reading about this dream....

[Tim]

Sad story. I saw some people in similar situations only not as bad when I had to go see my father when he was in therapy for a broken hip. It's so heart wrenching to see people in that kind of state. You described your feelings well enough to touch people's hearts in this one.

You missed a couple of words but no big deal. Good job.

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

It's sad, but hopeful!