i was TRUE

i wasn't arrogant
i wasn't rude..
it was you who made me screw..

i said what i felt
i did what i want
my heart was pure but you made it untrue

i was happy
i was sad
but what ever i was..i was glad

i was true
i was me
but now i dream to be me

you will regret
you will pay
for what you did you will sustain..

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Ralphy]

Wow, although emotional, and well written, I'm not sure I like what I heard. It really sounds as an unjustice was done here, to be yourself shouldn't come with a price...and for that, I'm truly sorry for the shame. I do know your poetry is outstanding, full of emotional wonders...I love the way you express each stanza and deliver the commanding tone. Speaking freely throughout each phrase, through the tears, and the drama...you have a wonder gift in writing...

[Big ol' Kahuna]

There is much power in the words of this poem. Lots of emotion. It is messed up when someone tries to change someone else, or when you feel compelled to change for someone else. You have to be true to you, no matter what, or it won't work. A life lesson and a nice powerful poem.

Nice write.

[John J. Smiley]

Sorry, I wasn't into this one.

[Winter McPherson]

It's so sad when one is so true but the other person is so not true! But this is what we have in those times.......that we can know that we were true to ourselves......we were real. It's important! And you've captured that in these lines.

[red_saphyre]

very emotionally touching.

[Akash]

Very strong...
The pace and tone is agressive...almost demanding!!
Nice one.

[Alice Oiseau]

Love the last stanza. Nice poem, nice emotion, and nicely written.
Cheers.

[Slender Smile/Husna Tay..]

Wow!
Sad and emotional at the same time challenging n bold.....:)
I am impressed vish:)
Its beautiful.

[Awake.&.Unafraid]

The emotion in this is very pure and true which i like, but the rhyming scheme confused me a little. I wasn't sure if you were trying to match the last lines of each verse, like the first two verses did, or the last lines WITHIN each verse, like the third verse. Good message, nice wording, if you were to make some adjustments to the rhyming I'd say it would be close to perfect :)

[Kelley]

some boys and men never know a good thing when they have it.
I loved how you told him what you felt and still stayed true to
yourself.

Great write thanks for sharing.
Kelley

[LonelySoul]

I didn't do it man...good work here