I love you more than you know...

I love you more than you know...

A Poem by Vaishali..^_^

 

 


 

I'm a lonely soul standing in the midst of this ocean of tears....


Living the darkest side of my life....
Over and over betrayed by your side...
Vitriolic volcano of life breaking my heart.....
Ethic stretching us apart....

Yearning for your love...
Obverse of what we dreamt...
Unfurnished by the essence of care...

Mourning for your died feelings...
Over and again thinking of you....
Revert to past memories...
Endure of this departure...

Torrent of this ocean flowing inside me...
Has taken my breath..
Avenge given to me for nothing is taking my life
Nothing else than you can heal the wounds of love...

Yell of my heart unhearable to all....
Opens my heart apart with despair...
Underneath the ocean silence buzzing off...

Knot made by the world seems unable to heal...
Neutral feeling arose in heart....

On this night of darkness...still....

With all my heart I love you more than you know....


 

 


© 2009 Vaishali..^_^



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Wow.. very touching and sad.. I could feel the emotions and they were not lost through the structure at all.. which I like as well. A sad story of one who still yearns for another who is long lost.. stories that many hold true to their beatings hearts through memories which do tend to fade over time for most people. Some have a hard time letting go.. when the intensity was that of a glorious fire! Sadly love is often one-sided.. but you never know if written for someone they may even feel the same way but hide it. I like the honesty that pours and I truly hope you find someone whom you can hold in the same regards one day here in the present! Life is simply too short to await one who may not be worthy of such deep emotions! Thank you so much for sharing! =)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Such a wonderful piece of poetry it really did touch a cord wih me you opened up and expressed your undying affection for the person you call home.

I loved the way you use the letters to create a message on the left hand side of this wonderful poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I simply loved this acrostic!
The way you have written it made it so flawless and beautiful, without any doubt...this is indeed a great piece of writing and one of your best indeed :)

Keep writing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I believe this is one of your stronger poems I've read by you. I love the alliteration of "vitriolic volcano" and the whole poem is creatively written.
Keep it up.
Cheers.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The emotion in your poem is heart wrenching. I love how you made it into an acrostic. That takes talent. Very well done, my friend-Vashali!

Hugs, Carole

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a touching one, more touching because that is how I feel right now. Plagued with emotions it was at that. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree with Lisette this is very emotionally driven, It is sad when you find that you are the only one in the relationship that you love and give and love some more but get nothing back..some times love is the cruelest of all emotions..

excellent presentation and poem...

Mia :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great acrostic poem. I think you did a really good job of writing something that is a bit different and shows deep feeling. You did a good job on this one.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A beautiful poem well written and explained i can connect and understand your words keep writing a beautiful piece

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice working with time and space
I am amazed by your innovative thinking
Causing me to express myself in this manner
Excuse my response,but I liked this work

Wonderfully expressive
Over time I hope you develope this artform
Relax and take your time
K ?


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was beautiful you managed to spell out the whole thing, and still make a great poem out of it. Sometimes people get stuck on some parts of it wondering what to put for a letter. This seemed to flow very smoothly tho

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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