In the darkness of night

In the darkness of night

A Poem by Vaishali..^_^

In the darkness of night

I tried to light up my side

You came in front of me

With the memories so bright

 

I thought i wont let you go

But you went and left me so

I cried to my destiny so loud

Though i knew you vanished in the crowd

 

You thought I'll cry whole night

But you were wrong i fought for my pride

I'm not insane better take away this pain

You can't break me as you thought when you hate me

 

I'm not the one you can play with

So better get lost and stay with

Someday when you might be at my place

I'll tell you what exactly LOVE is...

...



© 2010 Vaishali..^_^



Author's Note

Vaishali..^_^
Just a random piece..I wrote it at midnight...when i was unable to sleep

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the midnight poems are always the most powerful ones, cus you have this strong emotion in your heart, that you wanna talk to someone about, but there's no one there, so you write it down. i love this because it's so raw and beautiful and real. i can relate to some parts, i just love the power that comes with it. thanks for sharing ;)

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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midnight poems are always nice
because all of your ideas came at night
great work :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i learned that when you write something when you cant sleep it means you were meant to write it. wich makes it mean more.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dark and very sad. This piece makes me think of when I'm at my darkest points. It's crazy that people can do that to you. This was a very good emtional write , well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Caught my attention. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Raw and intense in emotions.. sometimes to just allow those feelings to flow into writing can be soooo moving. Playing out like the feeling of sleepless nights tossing and turning.. a broken heart can feel so many things.. including the love that's no longer there and supposed to be broken.. feeling rejected, played with and tossed aside.

So many including myself can relate to this.. the high price of love when it's over.. well it's never over.. only fading. You are so young.. I hope you put that passion into a goal more worth such great fire.. like this.. writing is an awesome outlet.. keep up the great work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

As Nish said, the midnight poems are always the most powerful... Always the ones filled to the brim with the most emotion(s). I really loved this piece, it was sad... Yet, lovely. So beautiful. I can really relate to this piece, the feeling... it's just all there, tucked inside my thought process, my mind, body and heart. Again, I loved this piece of poetry. Great job, and... wonderful ending.

Chloe.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow!!
loved the end...
you were so sure and confident and it was so much raw...
jus superb!!!

:) Love,
Krishna

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great write Lonely Angel ! I really liked
the flow of it and how it made you feel.

Thanks for sharing.
Kelley



Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

WOW!!!! its so good i luv the rhyming of the piece,.....and ur usage of words

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Great job! This is one of your best. The rhymes are good and the flow is excellent. You might want to look at this line again "You thought I'll cry whole night" You might want to change it to cry THE whole night or cry ALL night? Just and idea. Wonderfful job!

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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