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Katalaga

Katalaga

A Story by VALORMORE DE PLUME
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To end the reign of terror from the dreaded three headed beast of Cold Willow Province, Verson must seek out the lair of the dragon to destroy her.

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Katalaga

From the

Mindscapes

Of

Valormore

 

 

    With the first few steps, it’s evident that the journey will be fraught with peril. Acrid smoke intermingles with weighty fog, embracing soiled skin and clothing like a smothering wet blanket. Eerie shadows loiter at the margins of Verson’s eyesight, silent and too skittish for full viewing. These are the least of his concerns as he approaches the Caves of Aultophar, wherein lies Katalaga, the dreaded three headed beast of Cold Willow Province. Katalaga’s penchant for maiden meat sets many a brave knight and angry husband to perish on this quest for revenge on dragon’s flesh. Weathered bones, from scorched bodies, crumble beneath the boots of Verson as he ascends the craggy twisting trail, amidst thorny branches and slippery moss. His heavy armor, a welcome burden, although the chainmail habitually catches spikey briars, stinging tender skin, suckling droplets of purloined lifeblood. Another hundred yards of climbing toward the summit and the treacherous wooded wasteland shall cease to be an inconvenience, for they turn to ashes as they succumb to fiery breath from the beast laying bare rocky pinnacles beneath the escarpment.

    On such a night, the Caves of Aultophar await the return of Katalaga. Fog and smoke conceal the beast from sight and smell alike, allowing her to glide on leathery wings undetected, to forage through the villages in valley low for unwary sweet-smelling maidens. Her sharp talons deliver instant death, leaving neither shout nor whimper to alarm other tender morsels. She will consume her fill before returning.

    Verson shall have time to seek out her cache of eggs, to bash beneath his boots, but first he must put asunder her brood of hellish hatchlings and then best set the trap, from beneath their mangled bodies shall he lay in wait, with lance and sword at the ready, to pierce her grieving heart. Covered in their blood to mask his scent she will draw near to seek survivors. He best plan his thrust to coincide with inhalation before ignition of the fiery breath that will incinerate fallen remnants of her future, lest he burn amongst them.

The fatal deed is done the perilous trap is set without a moment extra; Katalaga’s bellowing shrill roar announces her return into the lair. Alarmed is she, this cannot be, nostrils flaring from scent of dragon’s blood lingering on the air. Three sets of eyes would but cry by way of senseless carnage, held back by seething fury. Drawing close, assessing most every detail, three heads not always better than one as grief consumes her reason.

    Verson holds his breath to prevent his death while mustering all his courage, tis now Katalaga stands above him. He knows he must hold back the thrust or turn to dust and ashes.

    As she prepares by drawing quaff of air that shall let loose her flaming anger, he plunges deep the readied lance into her despondent heart and arises with blade of steel to eliminate three heads in one swift strike.

THE END

By

Valormore De Plume

©1022016


© 2016 VALORMORE DE PLUME



Author's Note

VALORMORE DE PLUME
Flash fiction, under 500 words, not including title.

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I appreciate an author that is not afraid of niche writing. This is a story that only holds appeal for a small group of readers, as do many of your short stories (And they jump to a new niche more often than not). Instead of a story that is alright for everybody you wrote a tale that was good for somebody.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

VALORMORE DE PLUME

1 Year Ago

Thank you Author Gus. I appreciate you taking the time to express your perspective. It is my nature .. read more



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Great story with deep insight. I was captivated. Nothing but a brave heart will dare the dread. Nice work.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

VALORMORE DE PLUME

1 Year Ago

Bukbank, I appreciate your commenting. Your kind words place a warm smile on my face.
I appreciate an author that is not afraid of niche writing. This is a story that only holds appeal for a small group of readers, as do many of your short stories (And they jump to a new niche more often than not). Instead of a story that is alright for everybody you wrote a tale that was good for somebody.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

VALORMORE DE PLUME

1 Year Ago

Thank you Author Gus. I appreciate you taking the time to express your perspective. It is my nature .. read more
Great story, you capture the fantasy in such few words and in a hard tense to write in. Nice job.

If it's alright, I have two tiny suggestions:

1) What's Verson's motive for killing the beast? Did he lose someone? Is it for the glory? Delve into his character some more.

2) You end with the killing blow. What happened next? Show some falling action before you close.

Great story from a talented writer. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

VALORMORE DE PLUME

1 Year Ago

Thank you WriterGirl. I could add more to this, but in order to keep it as flash fiction (500 words .. read more
WriterGirl247247

1 Year Ago

Exactly why I love flash fiction:)
I love flash fiction, especially when it's related to fantasy, because it gives us such an interesting glance into a different world. This is no different - a fascinating story. I love how you fit the plot into under 500 words.
Consider making the wording a bit easier though. The best stories are usually the ones that can be understood easily, so consider replacing a few of the 'big words' with ones that are less demanding. This would ensure that your average reader doesn't get tired too quickly and zones out.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

VALORMORE DE PLUME

1 Year Ago

Thank you Kathrin S, for reading and commenting.
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Added on October 2, 2016
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Tags: Flash Fiction, Dragon lore, Adventure, Thriller, Fantasy

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