Let's travel

Let’s travel around the globe and see

the thick red line across

the answers we pretend to have.

 

Let’s travel around the globe and let

dark clouds clear the sky that once

used to be the blue house of the golden sun.

 

Let’s travel around the globe and try

to feel the warmth and strength each one

of us carries inside our vanity. 

 

Let’s travel through 195 countries and forget

the hatred that kills thousands.

 

Let’s travel through 195 countries and treasure

the love that connects billions.

 

Reviews

[Amanda Naomi]

i really like the first stanza
"the thick red line
the answers we pretend to have"

to an outsider they would see that line and say "woah! that person is absolutely crazy!" but we tell them to ourselves so that we don't have to face the fact that this world is not where it should be. we say we live in a civilized society, but how can we say that when there are people starving in our very own streets? that there are places in the world that don't have clean water. we tell ourselves lies, or answers in tick red tape, to make ourselves feel better.

great write!

[Sweets]

This is awesome!
I loved the use of parallelism in here.
and I loved the last line as well :)
Great work!

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and positive poem. I have travel the world. I never met a man or woman who wanted to died or kill anyone. We need to block out the liars and storytellers. People need a place to rest and food. I agree with your poem. Need 6 billion people to demand peace. A outstanding poem. Thank you.

[misha]

great job!

[Casper]

I really like this poem. Its beautifully written. Good job :)

[theunionisloud]

beautiful. I've always thought that the more you see on this earth, the less earthly you become... it's impossible, but true. Here, you've shown the only thing that's keeping us apart is misunderstandings. So, so true. Beautifully done.

[My Fair Lady]

Wow. There is a lot said in these simple lines.

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amen ...