This Is Just Who I Am: part 1

This Is Just Who I Am: part 1

A Story by Victoria

I hear the kids running out from the orchards, their little grubby hands full of peaches. The sun glinting off of their jet black hair, my daughter Alexa runs up to me throwing her arms around my neck. She's squealing, "Mama, Roberto's eating my peachessss!! Look they're alllllll gone!!". Alexa has always been my feisty one reminding me of my younger self. However my three boys are all their father right down to the wrinkle between their eyebrows. Roberto is the oldest of the boys and the meanest, he's level head and doesn't complain, the second one, my forgotten one Alejandro he's my little watchers does as he's told, and toddles after whomever is in charge, my last boy is Fernando is my troublemaker always putting his nose somewhere it doesn't belong, then there is my daughter Alexa all sass and her father's favorite, although she won't be the baby for very long.
For, I'm due at the end of the summer my husband Victor and I have been married for 12 years and we have five kids. We've always struggled for "dinero" or money he lives for it. He doesn't know much about his babies except Alexa is his favorite with her doe eyes, gap toothed smile. The way she smells strawberry gum and peach shampoo, how she cries, "Papi,carry me for favor." This is just a taste of my little life.

© 2017 Victoria



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Victoria
this is a short story about a family in the central valley, mexican influence. Work in progress

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Nicely captured moments in the day of a life, like seeing the story behind a family snapshot, introducing the reader to what will be one of many such moments and thoughts in the lives of a family being just that, a family.
This has a feel of looking at a photograph and wondering about the people we view. I think this would make a great series of stand alone chapters of all the people involved, weaving into a narrative that shows us pieces of a family in snapshots.


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It does have a feel - a flavour of those much loved family tales that I grew up on and induces a few oohs, ahhs and sighs. It's exactly what it says on the tin...
:)

Posted 6 Months Ago


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Victoria

6 Months Ago

thanks so much! more to come!
Nicely captured moments in the day of a life, like seeing the story behind a family snapshot, introducing the reader to what will be one of many such moments and thoughts in the lives of a family being just that, a family.
This has a feel of looking at a photograph and wondering about the people we view. I think this would make a great series of stand alone chapters of all the people involved, weaving into a narrative that shows us pieces of a family in snapshots.


Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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