Alone act.

felt like i needed to write something.

Beautiful girl... don't look at me.
There are so many more scars.. hidden underneath.
So many that you can't see.
Beautiful girl.. don't even think about me.

Walking home alone... isn't hard enough.
Living in a house with someone you don't know.
When you are by my side...
Hands always would meet.
Oh wonderful girl, just push me into the street.

Always begging to let myself go,
Falling into the unknown.
Tend to broken hearts...
I fear what I've known.

Sit on a lost tire, watching the fire burn away.
Words are never enough.. .
As all of these memories replay.

Face down, into my dreams.
Arms crossed..resting on my knees.
I sit here alone.
Always driving you away.
Oh wonderful, I never have the guts to let you stay.

So pitiful, Faithfully insecure.
Will I always be afraid?

Author's Note

Thanks for reading my poem.. let me know what you think.. all comments and reviews are welcome. i just needed to say what was on my mind. This is me venting. Thank you.
(did some grammatical work. I always appreciate viewers pointing out my
mistakes so I can fix them)

Reviews

[Lunar Lightning]

You dragged me into this one from line one, I usually try to only review one of people's poems, because reviewing more than one tends to just get repetitive and somewhat annoying, because then there is more to go through. But this poem I really enjoyed. You have a certain voice in your poetry that draws people in, me in particular it seems. Though, again, quick grammar lesson (sorry). Only one real suggestion this time though: it should be "Living in a house" not "Living in house". Again, very nicely written, keep writing, I intend to keep reading.

Luna

[Frantzuu]

Great poem dude, it's very emotional. nice work.

[Comatose]

The emotion in this piece is so touching...you describe a lonliness that cuts to the heart, and you described it very well.

[AllyKinzz:)]

I sense sadness, or um... confusion.
Its a good piece of work.
The way you transitioned into the next sentence was good.

Keep it up.
I love reading your pieces.

[Raven Radke]

Nice..Very nice indeed..
Creative. Work of art.
I enjoyed reading this.
100% is my vote

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

excellent. its good to vent. "thers are so many scars, hidden underneath" a line that i can relate to. very good write, Matt

[Rain Kissed Secret]

Hmmm.. It doesn't seem like its going anywhere, but your view point changed. So that's... odd. Let's see.. I liked the fact that you were actually venting. Its much easier to see things when you aren't manipulating your words. It's the raw feeling, and I don't know if I can't feel it because of my "mood' right now, or because it simply isn't there. Either way I suppose, for a "poem" you did okay.

Good luck Matthew Hartwell

[Micah_s5]

Nice, I liked it. Well put together, I thought it flow pretty well and it's easy to feel what your saying.