BEWITCHED IN MY DREAM

BEWITCHED IN MY DREAM

A Poem by vspjaguar
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I wrote this poem when I was a teen.I had this dream now and then in which I meet my perfect women.One night I woke up and wrote a poem about it.

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Is this how you all feel when you are bewitched in love?

I talk with her everyday and then realize she is an illusion

which eventually fades. I keep wondering why and how

I feel heaven in her presence? I get caught in this confusion.

 

When I close my eyes and open it in the world of fantasy,

She appears before me. I stand awestruck in this pleasant shock.

The beautiful butterflies flying around us added more ecstasy,

along with constant chirping of the birds flying happily as a flock.

 

We sang our romantic songs and danced near the fabulous Pond,

I held her gently and we waltzed under the heavily pouring rain.

Her love was so pure; it took me to another realm beyond,

Where happiness filled the senses and drained all the pain.

 

I keep staring into her eyes, amazed by the way they speak

thousand words through their expressions. My heart is weak,

I couldn't withstand her piercing eyes. it was a manifestation-

Of pure elegance. Her beautiful eyes induced a state of elation.

 

When I am embracing her, I feel that the world I am in

is so real. Only her presence makes this dream world to spin.

I don't want to leave her alone in this world. Oh my dear!

my dream is going to end, she is going to disappear.

 

Every time she takes a step and goes away, my heartbreaks

when she fades away from me, I experience earthquakes

I cannot be in this world without you. I am incomplete,

you are the last jigsaw piece of my life, please complete.


© 2013 vspjaguar



Author's Note

vspjaguar
I broke many lines for the rhyme scheme.Breaking of lines might seem weird but I wanted this poem to rhyme.Please give your feedback about this poem.By reviewing this you are reviewing the teen poet from my past.I am eagerly awaiting..

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I love the way you paint this awesome illusion...
Knowing your penchant for rhyming..I would just say that it added to the attractiveness of the piece. Sometimes, though I hear that we have to break rhyme to truly express ourselves and not get confined in the word straightjacket.
But hell!~ This is something I do too. So I like it!


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot! I've tried writing non rhyming poetry, after its completion I see that something is in.. read more
DIVYA

4 Years Ago

sounds so familiar! :)
vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

ha ha! :D



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Dreams can bewitch our heart and mind. I like the flow of thoughts leading to the very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

2 Years Ago

I am glad you liked it. Thanks
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

I did and you are welcome.
I love the way you paint this awesome illusion...
Knowing your penchant for rhyming..I would just say that it added to the attractiveness of the piece. Sometimes, though I hear that we have to break rhyme to truly express ourselves and not get confined in the word straightjacket.
But hell!~ This is something I do too. So I like it!


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot! I've tried writing non rhyming poetry, after its completion I see that something is in.. read more
DIVYA

4 Years Ago

sounds so familiar! :)
vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

ha ha! :D
And u used a pic of spinning top...
How inceptionic...(is that even a word)

Posted 4 Years Ago


PoeticVandal

4 Years Ago

As for the poem.. like always
beautiful
vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

I'm glad you noticed that! I'll use that for every poem that happens in my dream world! :D
I actually had a dream similar to this before. It sucks, but this doesn't. Very amazing! :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

I have a tendency to exaggerate my dreams :P! anyway thanks a lot for your review :)
vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

ps : sorry for the late reply!
Jordyn

4 Years Ago

It's okay!!
Very romantic.
Bewitched indeed!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

ha ha! thanks a lot :D
Very nice write, I of course am able to relate to this. It sure is no fun when you know your dream is soon to end, and she is to disappear. Thumbs up to this.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

thanks a lot! sometimes our dream world seems better,doesn't it? :)
vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

ps: sorry for the late reply!
I really love this piece, such an amazing write here.
Enjoy the rhyme scheme, and the emotions.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

thanks a lot! I am glad you enjoyed this.
yea i agree - it IS lovely -a teenagers dream girl.... the pictures you painted with this poem are beautiful - butterflies, pond , rain. i love the rain! and i dont know why - but i always relate it with love.. good one. :)


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot! I love the rain too,especially getting drenched in the rain.It just makes me feel so h.. read more
The Dreamer

4 Years Ago

yea me too XD
wow! lovely piece my brother..Very creative piece this one.. I loved the last stanza especially. Simply wow!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

thanks mate!

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Added on January 9, 2013
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vspjaguar
vspjaguar

Chennai, Tamil Nadu, India



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HI friends! My name is Sai Prasath,I am from Southern part of India.I started writing poems 2 years back when I realized that a pen in my hand can speak many unspoken words.I use poetry as a tool to.. more..

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