Defining True Love.

This piece is something like self-preaching.I actually converted that into a poem by adding a proper rhythm and consonance to it.

Don't be deceived by the sweet talks.
Sound is something that will resonate in the ear and just appears real for a few days,
But the blatant truth is that, sound vanishes.

The true love is not what we hear,its what we feel.
what we hear eventually gets lost in the vastness but the feeling of a true love will remain forever.
Try to look beyond the masked sweetness.

Don't be deceived by the devious act.
Stage is set,the act is ready.Try to enjoy it and walk away unaffected after the show,
Pay the price for the ticket carefully.

True love should prevail in this world.
What we need to do is fight against the fake ones,it is the devil disguised as an angel.
Try to listen to the angels inside you.

Author's Note

This is just the idea,I will try to write another version.Just let me know how good this is,I deviated from my style and experimented a little. PS:sorry if I am too preachy :P

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree.
"True love should prevail in this world.
What we need to do is fight against the fake ones,it is the devil disguised as an angel.
Try to listen to the angels inside you."
Real love is a steady flow of kindness, concern and time spend together. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Ambereen]

Stage is set,the act is ready you captured the emotions well. Well penned .

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! :)

[quinfinn]

it is confusing sometimes, the difference between love and lust, but the difference is plain. one is emotional and one is hormonal. problem is, which is which and who is who? i love this write!

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot!

[DIVYA]

I liked the third stanza the best. Great philosophy of living suggested there!

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! this is just an experimental version, I will be writing a version 2 for this piece.

[Pawprints]

I like how you stated everything so clearly. Great idea and poem!

[vspjaguar]

thanks a lot! I am writing another version of this,any suggestions for improvement?

[Pawprints]

Maybe you could not be addressing someone and just have it be statements, though that may be a little too drastic. Oh, and just something about your grammar (I don't mean to be annoying) generally, there's a space after the comma. Without it it kind of seems like you're rushing, though that can be a good effect.

[vspjaguar]

thanks a lot for your valuable suggestion, the corrections will be incorporated soon!

[Pawprints]

:)

[RachelReaper]

I love the comparison you made here between fake love being a demon disguised as an angel, because in all metaphorical truth, that's a really great comparison and you were able to get the feel of it across in words.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot Rachel! :)

[The Dreamer]

the idea is really good - love and lust - both look the same, you never know which is which , until you look closely - many have been deceived by it - it'll be really good after you edit it and give a much more poetic feel to it - i think changing the structure a but might do that.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks for the review! I will be improving this poem shortly! :)

[vspjaguar]

Give me some suggestions for my version 2, how can I make this better?

[imdvader]

I just googled what consonance is,thanks for teaching me that.As a poem this is good.Well written actually but something seems to be missing.

[vspjaguar]

I ll write an improved version mate!