Defining True Love.

Defining True Love.

A Poem by vspjaguar
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This piece is something like self-preaching.I actually converted that into a poem by adding a proper rhythm and consonance to it.

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Don't be deceived by the sweet talks.
Sound is something that will resonate in the ear and just appears real for a few days,
But the blatant truth is that, sound vanishes.

The true love is not what we hear,its what we feel.
what we hear eventually gets lost in the vastness but the feeling of a true love will remain forever.
Try to look beyond the masked sweetness.

Don't be deceived by the devious act.
Stage is set,the act is ready.Try to enjoy it and walk away unaffected after the show,
Pay the price for the ticket carefully.

True love should prevail in this world.
What we need to do is fight against the fake ones,it is the devil disguised as an angel.
Try to listen to the angels inside you.


© 2015 vspjaguar



Author's Note

vspjaguar
This is just the idea,I will try to write another version.Just let me know how good this is,I deviated from my style and experimented a little. PS:sorry if I am too preachy :P

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I agree.
"True love should prevail in this world.
What we need to do is fight against the fake ones,it is the devil disguised as an angel.
Try to listen to the angels inside you."
Real love is a steady flow of kindness, concern and time spend together. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

2 Years Ago

Thanks a lot :)
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are welcome.



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I agree.
"True love should prevail in this world.
What we need to do is fight against the fake ones,it is the devil disguised as an angel.
Try to listen to the angels inside you."
Real love is a steady flow of kindness, concern and time spend together. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

2 Years Ago

Thanks a lot :)
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are welcome.
Stage is set,the act is ready you captured the emotions well. Well penned .

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot! :)
it is confusing sometimes, the difference between love and lust, but the difference is plain. one is emotional and one is hormonal. problem is, which is which and who is who? i love this write!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot!
I liked the third stanza the best. Great philosophy of living suggested there!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot! this is just an experimental version, I will be writing a version 2 for this piece.
I like how you stated everything so clearly. Great idea and poem!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pawprints

4 Years Ago

Maybe you could not be addressing someone and just have it be statements, though that may be a littl.. read more
vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

thanks a lot for your valuable suggestion, the corrections will be incorporated soon!
Pawprints

4 Years Ago

:)
I love the comparison you made here between fake love being a demon disguised as an angel, because in all metaphorical truth, that's a really great comparison and you were able to get the feel of it across in words.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Rachel! :)
the idea is really good - love and lust - both look the same, you never know which is which , until you look closely - many have been deceived by it - it'll be really good after you edit it and give a much more poetic feel to it - i think changing the structure a but might do that.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

Thanks for the review! I will be improving this poem shortly! :)
vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

Give me some suggestions for my version 2, how can I make this better?
I just googled what consonance is,thanks for teaching me that.As a poem this is good.Well written actually but something seems to be missing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


vspjaguar

4 Years Ago

I ll write an improved version mate!

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vspjaguar

Chennai, Tamil Nadu, India



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