loneliness

empty feels.negative vibes.painful heart and unstoppable tears.

TODAY,LONELY I AM.

ALL ALONE STANDING FOR MYSELF ON A PATH WHERE THERE IS NO ONE BY MY SIDE.

NOBODY TO HOLD ME WHEN I FALL.NOBODY TO WIPE MY TEARS.I SCREAM BUT THERE IS NOBODY WHO CAN SEE MY PAIN.

WAS I SO UNWANTED TO HIM?

THOSE WONDERFUL TIMES WHEN WE HELD EACH OTHER'S HANDS AND LOOKED INTO EACH OTHER'S EYES AS IF WE HAD NO WORRIES OR FEAR.

WHEN DID IT ALL FADE AWAY?

WHY DOES HE NOT CARE ANYMORE? 

I REMEMBER THE FIRST TIME HE HUG ME,THE FIRST TIME HE KISSED ME.

THAT LOVE HAS BECOME INVISIBLE SOMEWHERE.

HE DOESN'T CARE AND DOES NOT WANT TO LOVE ME ANYMORE.

BUT,MY HEART LOVES HIM STILL THE SAME.

HE MAKES ME CRY,HE BREAKS ME FROM INSIDE.BUT,I LOVE HIM TRULY.

HE WAS MINE.

BUT NOW HE REMAINS TO ME A DREAM

A DREAM THAT I AM IN LOVE WITH.

Reviews

[Razor Clawson]

A good piece that most loners (myself included) can relate. Raw feelings and emotions are well done here. Keep writing.

However, as a recommendation I would like to suggest looking up metaphors, similes and rhyming techniques; this way you can make your poetry more powerful and convey your feelings better.

[Wajiha Nayeem]

thank you so much.And as u suggested me to take up few things and include it in my poetry n write,i would surely do that,thank you for your support

[Najam Us Saher]

Wow. You left me speechless. Wonderful. Truly expressed your feelings. Well done.

[Wajiha Nayeem]

thank you so much.yes i truly did express the feeling i am in right now.

[Najam Us Saher]

That's the only thing one can do. Write down whatever they feel to overcome their sadness. After writing, the poem stands as a sense of comfort. You're welcome.